Black Poetry : Black Rain

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Natasha, Jun 29, 2001.

  1. Natasha

    Natasha Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    It’s bright and sunny today
    Yet my heart still seems full and heavy.
    My eyes are dry
    Free from tears
    Yet my soul feels the wetness
    Of the Black Rain.
    I can’t explain the feeling
    I can’t begin to discribe with words
    How cloudy and dismal it is in here.
    I look up and see the sun
    But I feel the drops on my heart
    On my soul
    In my spirit
    The wetness of the
    Black Rain.
     
  2. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    WITHIN ME

    MY LIGHT OF LOVE
    BECKON'S U INSIDE
    A LOVELY PLACE U CAN HIDE
    AS I OFFER COMFORT AND JOY
    PLAY WIT ME LIKE YA PERSONAL TOY
    I'M THE DREAM OF EXTREME
    TO KILL YA PAIN PUT HURT TO SHAME
    MAKE YA RAIN OF BLACK
    POUR PURPLE PASSION OF LOVE
    FROM ABOVE AND SET U FREE
    JUST COME TO ME .....

    I FEEL THEE OPENLY
    I DON'T KNOW WHY
    BUT I GOTTA FLY
    TO MAKE YA DAY
    TURN YA GRAY 2 BLUE
    AND KEEP LOVIN U.

    KEEP FAITH AND WHATEVER SHELL BE LIFTED
    NO TEARS
    NO FEARS

    ((WHITE WATER))
    $R:heart: :heart: :heart: :heart: :heart: :love:
     
  3. LISTERSCRIBIN'

    LISTERSCRIBIN' Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i feel ya, nat...black rain. lovin' the flo of this piece and the name of the title, as well. keep on scribin', gurl...it's tyght.
     
  4. MzBlkAngel

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    flow head on ..likes the vibe of both flows nicely posed
     
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    Oh I do know the Black Rain

    Very nicely scribed. Feel the wetness on your heart. It is bleeding tears of its own. Dry up the windows to your soul. Pull back from the deep dark abyss.
    Its depth is immeasurable and leaves another void. Hole in your heart, and :confused: confusion on your mind.

    Two rules to anything you have to understand or accept in life.

    1) Don't sweat the small stuff

    2) Its all small stuff

    Meaning if you think of things in this manner, solutions drop out, because you haven't overwhelmed yourself with the issue.

    The sadness of crying on the inside, while dry eyed to the world. It is a lonely place to be found. One can come from within the Black Rain, if all will is summoned and a refusal to die or give up on what needs to be achieved is uttered.
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    It's hard to imagine how low you can go sometimes. Yet sometimes we are justified in feeling sorry for ourselves. Anyway, the dark imagery in this scribe was well executed.
     
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    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    shimmering black rain
    constantly dripping in me
    come sun - set me free....

    loved the title and concept...took be to that haiku
    thanks for stimulating
     
  8. Blkthunder

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    nice title... inspiring...

    Souls dont cry
    you may ask why
    For souls see clear
    We are drops of His tears
    Black Rain

    When the eyes perspire
    the body is tired
    close the windows look within
    He's closer than the next breath take one in..............
    Black Rain



    bring it backk :hearthis: :hearthis: :hearthis: :hearthis: :hearthis:
     
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