Black Poetry : Black Clouds...(New Comer...Show me love)

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  1. FeLoNy

    FeLoNy Member MEMBER

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    ..:Black Clouds:..

    Darkness falls upon the land,
    evil has it in its grasp,
    the stinch of poverty sweeps though
    the air like gusty winds,
    a place where zombies never laugh...

    then again...

    The zombies are not zombies
    but the zombies are crack heads,
    smack head sucken on a glass ****
    searching for that passionate trip
    of what may seem everlasting
    but it passes quick...

    or maybe...

    What evil has in its grasp
    is the minds of are youth
    desperately trying to find the root
    of all evil in other words "grind for loot",
    but end up being in the wrong place
    at the wrong time when the 45 shoots...

    I have no idea why the clouds are so black in Oakland, California

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    Im new to the poerty world so if you think I need any pointers...then pleaze don't hold any punches...thank you
     
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    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :wave: FELONY :wave:

    Make yourself at home ..... sit back and read a few of the family's joynts, and write plenty of your own for all to enjoy!!

    Look forward to reading more of your work!

    :wave:

    N2
     
  3. FeLoNy

    FeLoNy Member MEMBER

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    Thanks for the welcome and yes you will see a lot more...700
     
  4. Kitana

    Kitana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Felony

    Hi and Welcome:)

    this is a deep piece and I'm sure a question people are asking every day...it is a situation which is happening all over, way too often...a total waste of a god given gift...life...

    K
     
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    Felony..

    oakland isn't the only place that has dark clouds, they're all over. but keep ya pen poised and write about the sunshine on those cloudy days. nice and deep read.
     
  6. FeLoNy

    FeLoNy Member MEMBER

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    Thanks for the replies...I know it's like that all over...we just have to keep over heads up...one day I will get out of the quetto...700
     
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    I liked this.... The truth was defintely told. Wonderful expression of your thoughts... I will be looking forward to hearing more from you...... 1 Love
     
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    felony.


    ...when evil has it's grasp on the minds
    of our youth... the clouds are black all
    over this country. thank you for sharing
    your peace, poet.

    welcome to destee's... enjoy your stay. :)

    alwayspeace,
    elayne.
     
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    diva08 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    das cool. me likes. keep doing it.

    d
     
  10. MissPoetik

    MissPoetik Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    welcome...

    welcome... just wanted to let you know that was a nice piece and i can relate. also wanna drop you some northern cali love... holla. :wave:
     
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