Black Poetry : Bitter Sweet 16...

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  1. MzMelanie2u2

    MzMelanie2u2 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    (Alarm clock goes off)
    *sigh*
    I woke up this morning and just wanted to scream,
    Because today I turned bitter sweet 16.
    Where is my ecstasy, why am I feeling such pain?
    Why does it feel as if I’m not living, I’m just existing, and its all in vain?
    The thoughts that are going on in my head
    Are of those things that most of us dread.

    *thinking*…
    “This means I’m one step closer to death, to that day when I will willingly take my last breath…
    Can someone please turn back the hands of time,
    Its like just two years ago it was my grandmothers turn,
    and now its almost mine”…

    God knows its not normal for a child to feel this way
    But I just cant help it,
    Cuz I just turned bitter sweet 16 today…

    I just want to go back to sleep and dream it all away
    Hoping and praying that when I awake,
    this will all be yesterday…
    Because I hate the fact that I’m bitter sweet 16 today

    *phone rings*

    “Happy Birthday Baby…..!”…recites an all too familiar voice…
    “Please don’t remind me”…is how I instantaneously respond
    And some how it wasn’t by choice…
    “Awwwwwe, you should be happy that God has blessed you to see another year…”
    At that moment, my eyes swell up with immense tears, And
    Wet, salty balm shells flow and eventually fall from my cheeks
    And at that moment my soul reaches a breach with my emotions
    And I decide that I should be grateful for my time left here…
    And really, I don’t have anything to fear anyway…
    For I am truly bless that I am bitter sweet 16 today…
     
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    I remember my 16th and how the day was and what i felt what a deep insightful
    reminder of 16 ........................................................................................
     
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    I wish it would have been just sweet without the bitter. Thinking back, way back, lol, to my sixteenth birthday, I do remember thinking that it wasn't all it was cracked up to be. But your vibe sounds sadder than this. There is much that can and will change in your life. A fantastic writer such as yourself, who knows what the future may hold. Keep flowing, I'll keep reading.
     
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    MzMelanie2u2 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow...its amazing how yall picked up on my vibe, and your right "Watz", it was indeed alot sadder than that. and i thank you for encouraging words. And i also want to thank you "Rich" you alway show some of the best love..lol.."KEEP EM COMIN" FAM...1... :hearts3:
     
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    gurl u breakin my heart wit yo words..... wish that u'd had a betta experience wit aging, im just waitin for my tyme to come, and when it does it does, im grateful for tha tyme I've had.. but I do wish I had met u sooner though :-D
     
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    Deg C...I read your reply, and it made tears come to my eyes. And you know i got mad love for you too. And like wise, i wish i had met you alot sooner, cuz i know my 16th b-day would've definately been sweet with you there to celebrate it with me. And trust me, now that i do know you, im truley enjoying aging cuz your right there by my side...So just do me a favor, and "KEEP THE LOVE COMIN"...lol...1 :hearts3:
     
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    I definitely know what you say, girl. My teenage years were very sad times for the most part. You posed this so well.
     
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    feelin the rhymes and the mixture of dialouge within this poem. Nice drop here, keep posting them
     
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    MzMelanie2u2 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :hiya: everyone....Yall make me feel so at home with my poetry. Comin here everyday and seeing how yall give mad love, is really encouraging to me...So i just want to thank all of you, yall are all such beautiful people and writers...And I've got mad love and respect for each and every last one...so do me a favor, and "KEEP EM COMMIN"...1
    :luvu:
     
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    most welcome sista........
    love so freely and openly make a day more brighter
    this what we about embracing each other as we grow
    poeticly .......love ya work of art .
     
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