Black Poetry : BIRD'S EYE VIEW

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Akilles, Nov 4, 2005.

  1. Akilles

    Akilles Banned MEMBER

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    On occassian I would meet an Owl who had a long feathers extended down like dreads
    She would speak to me in great humlity and wisdom and this is what she once said
    Lo! I have lived and traveled to many different places both and here and there.
    And it appears envy, gossip and incomprehension rules everywhere.
    Lo! But for the life of me and I may never know why!
    Some birds have wings but they utterly refuse to fly!
    Instead they stumble blindly and weak they live to support the strong.
    Right or wrong they march on to the beat of a song that is not their own.
    And then there are others whom out of spite throw stones but they do not like to catch'em.
    Fowl who seem to loathe in misery strangely this too I could never fathom.
     
  2. Akilles

    Akilles Banned MEMBER

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    I hope you guys like it I wrote it as a children's poem to teach life to my son and other kids about human behavior.
     
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    Hi Akilles :)
    Welcome !!!! to the Family
    What a lovely poem
    and yes i can feel how life lesson
    through nature can teach
    and that makes it FUN :)
    I just enjoy the whole flow
    and looking forward to more of your poems

    Peace
     
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    nice poem and great story...somehow it does not seem complete though...
    keep flowin

    one love
    khasm
     
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    nice flow i enjoyed the story within
     
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    very well stated love the flow ...................
     
  7. Akilles

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    yes the poem is not complete because its an part of a larger poem and children's story.

    I altered it slighty to make it a short poem for this forum.

    Thanks for the comments.
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I liked the way this was posed, and appreciate what this piece has to say. Thanks for bringing this to us brotha.
     
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