Black Poetry : Between Da Pillars of Da Temple

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  1. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    Temple of land
    so call american
    standing between
    da pillars of hope
    watching da corner
    another fall under
    gun smoke

    Pushing like da mighty
    samson in betrayal
    by our dear delinquency
    blind to the walls
    which stand dividing
    da motherland from
    american as africans hope

    Da black sheet pitted me
    at the root
    i stand between these pillars
    of unjustice
    fed the sour racism
    as they pour da liquid lava
    of society on me
    i stand capside at da temple
    of deceived living of format
    da lock of my hair been stripped
    i hear laughter of cells closing
    on my nation

    Jobless, black hole of nowhere
    no light, just da empty space
    depression u can't understand
    yet feel the realism it leaves
    upon the mental of dark misery
    drowned by da autumn rain
    indulged by da extremities of my
    own eyez secretion
    i stumble in a vision and power
    arised through thy prayer

    Redeeming rejection
    imagination dreadful
    as it reveals da execution
    da pillars start to rumble
    ground breakz darkness settles in
    chains break , mind open
    light befound , belief stored
    intense structure falls under
    the vast of domestic violence
    destruction of unloyality
    the pillars come tumbling down !
     
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    Tantrum Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yup these speaks truths
    We are living in a world
    Where things are ever so changing
    We have to be able to help one another
    No push away and fight each other
    Much Love on this drop poet
    Loving the realism on this piece
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    Thankz brutha Tantrum , much luv at ya !
     
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    Hi Brother Rich
    wow...I feel the strenght of the black man
    and like a pillar he stands
    even when the other try to bring him down


    Much love poet..very powerful drop

    Peace
     
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    Thank u sista Bluewater, i stand and stand and stand when
    pillars crumble and the temple fall i'll be standing
    in da grace of GOD's almighty.........................
     
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    The title jumps out at you and the flo delivers.
    Deep piece wit much truth and wisdom.
    One love
     
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    rich you spoke the some truth here keep giving it to us.
     
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    Thank you both skrybble7 and Nevar for the warm love
    and visting the pillars and the temple where i stand......
     
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    The way are read this is that you strive to be one of those pillars that hold up the foundation no matter how heavy the weight. I really liked your use of metaphor in this tight write.
     
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    Excellent write Rich!:love:
     
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