Black Poetry : Better Dayz

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by SwtT, Apr 12, 2003.

  1. SwtT

    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I take my anger out on everyone
    Even on my closest friends
    I'm starting to act antisocial
    Cutting all ties and ends
    I cry myself to sleep
    Now just about every night
    The littlest thing bothers me
    And makes me want to fight
    I can't remember the last time
    That I was truly happy and not sad
    But ****** gettin under my skin
    Slowly driving me mad
    I know I'll pick myself up
    I just need a little time
    See, somebody broke my trust
    And to me, that's the worst crime
    I'm tryin to keep my head up
    Tryin to diss his name
    I'll deal with him one day
    It don't even matter whose to blame
    I'm trying to keep my chin from quivering
    And keep my spirits high
    But I'm in the midsts of a depression
    And it kinda makes me wanna die
    It happened now it's done
    And now I'm more informed
    My sadness is from not listening
    Though I had previously been warned
    So I'm gonna wipe my tears
    Stop frowning and smile
    My past was full of clouds
    But my future will shine a mile
    I just need a little time
    To mend my heart in so many ways
    But eventually I'll get over it
    And soon I'll see better dayz
    :shades:
     
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    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    FORECAST FORGIVENESS

    Let it go... with your powerful flow!

    1poetsought ~ ;)
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    well felt as tyme go by
    u will mend learn to love
    and enjoy all your friendz

    one whom leave u in pain
    is only a myth of thoughts
    as u let it all out ............
    say it as u feel it sista
     
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    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you rich and 1poet. Thanks for the love!!!!
    mR aNOn,...Ok, I thank you for your critisim, however it may be hard to take. I wrote this poem when I was feeling the emotions..they just came out on paper and pen. No scheme to my madness, though I prefer the abab rhyme scheme. Yes, I have heard of free verse and yes, i do write free verse. But me being me, I don't feel it like I feel rhyme schemes sometimes , . I really don't feel that poetry should be studied at all(by the way, no i don't study poetry). Poetry is emotions Poetry is a flow. There's no science Know what I mean:grin: How can u study what someone is going thru when they have this pen and paper in their hands and they just let it OUT. Poetry is like tears without Klennex b/c after you write the poem, you feel as if you have just gotten everything off your chest. Perotry is a way to kill some one's soul...without picking up a gun. Words are powerful and au natural...THIS is what poetry is to me
     
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