Black Poetry : before the dawning (deep waters)

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  1. alyce

    alyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    santa barbara stretches
    its bronzed beaches
    like a languishing
    lady in love along
    the western coast...
    the coolness under
    the sparse palm trees
    reminds me of the year
    before he dawned
    on me

    & I was backstroking
    without a life jacket
    no buoy in sight
    to warn me of deeper
    waters just beyond
    the place where I tried
    to stand
    ...my toes tipped....

    morro bay dips along & drapes the
    edges of cliffs that
    jut out in beautiful swollen
    ridges like the urgency of
    manhood's search for
    release thru intimacy

    and I was climbing the
    uncharted paths on
    a water-bathed rock
    held fast by the ocean floor...
    no markers to guide me
    ..my feet slipped

    carmel-by-the-sea
    is to me the play
    before the loving begins
    and the delicious tremors
    long after it ends

    and I was trembling
    under my circumstance
    listening for the moon
    and the tide to start
    their dance

    ...my mind tripped

    thinking perhaps
    there was a love as
    perfect as the sunset
    kissing the sea

    almost as if prophetically

    the year before
    he dawned on me



    alyce (c) 2002
     
  2. baller

    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    sounds familiar.
    the warf
    the harbor
    the cliffs
    THE UCSB ladies volleyball team...who plays on the beach.:)
    YES...i've been there.
    {even to the nude beaches just north of there.:)}

    THERE ARE PLEASURES ALL AROUND.

    hmmm.

    i digress

    BEAUTIFULLY SCRIPTED, dear lady.:)
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    wow!!! Alyce my walk down ya memory lane made me feel
    i was their beside u until he came gurl ya sharing something
    sweet here
     
  4. alyce

    alyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    see...

    baller, my brotha... it's just that way if ya eva been there ain't it? we do share some of the same memories...something bout them nekkid private coves up 'round off in there, doe....(and thas a
    poem you gonna hafta write) :wink:

    Rich...thank you kindly for your words. You are ALWAYS so sweet.

    thanx Poets!

    alyce
     
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    sraheem2 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    OOOH ****! Love the way you utilize the language and work my mind camera. I've been up and down all these beautiful places but they ain't NEVA looked like this! Seeing through your eyes is a wonderfully sensual experience.


    Brotha Peace
     
  6. UbZoRbShUn

    UbZoRbShUn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hello Delta

    I wanna go to this place alyce is talkin bout.... yes I want a window seat..... Ms. A, beautiful



    One
     
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    shaz Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I liked the smooth flava of this piece
    thanks for sharing
     
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    Alyce

    I love your mental pictures ma...

    Reas
     
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