Black Poetry : Becoming a Writer #2

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  1. rhymebad

    rhymebad Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Becoming a Writer #2

    The grammar was dull as it hammer my scull like rain drops
    Make my brain pop during compositions, friction never stop
    Heavy labor and sweaty behavior, be nice to have a device
    That would make me smarter and harder homework a sacrifice
    My dome perked twice as hard to writing I’m torn as a stranger
    And warned of danger I may not succeed need the Lone Ranger
    Tactics in order to shoot em up, much apprehension in getting
    Rap attention,whack buster on staff, lackluster paragraph regretting
    Writing had ragedy features putting agony on teachers some letting
    My pride down this writing affair failed ready to send airmail
    To the principal explaining my absence no Afro Sheen hair stale
    The education system is a shock like mechanisms on a clock
    It’s a tick tock complicated affair it’s dominated my hair now drop
    Grease like John Travolta making a trivia to Olivia Newton so hot
    Like a project this is time consuming as rhymes zooming through
    My head, perfuming the misled like Avon keep on tuning a few
    Lots of drastic fuss and a classic thrust on me to write I knew
    I had too its like a small amount of rain couldn’t account for
    All the pain which roasts so hot on the growth of crops a star
    In my own way, jot down hot nouns everyday, later my class
    Got assigned to Mr Bruce
     
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    Sha'iyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this is amazing

    i love the flow in this piece. very immaculate, articulate, and engaging word play. what more can I say? hot lines had my mind like :book:

    nice droppings, Shane
     
  3. Rashad

    Rashad Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yes Sir,
    pleasantly entertained poet...Tight!
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Your word play and rhythm is what's poppin.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    awesomely done in a poetic vibe of rhythm
     
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