Black Poetry : Beautiful Stranger

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Just_Me, Mar 24, 2004.

  1. Just_Me

    Just_Me Member MEMBER

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    Beautiful Stranger of the night
    you got me felling so euphoric inside
    As I imagine the passionate look in your eyes
    As you hold me closely and our souls coincide
    I'd love you but I don't know your name
    If I'd known you for years I'd still feel the same
    cause if you're anything like
    what I imagine inside
    you're destined to be the love of my life
    you already have so many things
    like your beautiful voice and the words that you sing
    your talent
    is so attractive to me
    that it sparks my curiosity
    this is why I imagine these things
    the mysterious dream of us
    takes over my mind so much
    When I see you perform
    It's like your words are seduction
    that causes an abduction of my senses
    I'm so serious
    I'm delirious when I see you
    this is all for a stranger I never knew
     
  2. rasheed

    rasheed Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Just_Me,
    You have been blessed to pen a beautifully flowing and powerful piece here...very nice...luv this poem.....when you edit it please consider these grammar changes:

    "cause if you're anything like"
    "you're destined to be the love of my life"
    "that causes an abduction of my senses"

    Please excuse my obsession to offer you these suggestions but the poem is such a masterpiece that it called me.

    If i'm out of my place, sorry.

    Peace and Blessings
     
  3. cocobutterskyn

    cocobutterskyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this reminds me of...

    the way I feel about the singer Joe!
    (my name came from one of his songs)

    singing... "cocoabutterskin i can't wait 'til i get in your body" :)

    thanks for sharing this
    sweet peace of poetry


    feelin'it souldeep!
    Coco :heart:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    just beautifully sprayed ya talent is far more sweeter to the page
    love it
     
  5. LovelyGoldenOne

    LovelyGoldenOne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    beautiful...
     
  6. Just_Me

    Just_Me Member MEMBER

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    Thanks for all the positive feedback and thanks rasheed for that grammer check cause some people would have hated instead of helping
    I'm glad that this forum has such positive people :)
     
  7. Antar

    Antar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    miraculiss, spectaculiss
    picture bliss

    loved it

    one
    /antar
     
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    Envy Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I love & feel.

    E :spinstar:
     
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    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    oooohhhh
    this is so nice
    feeling this
    mental picture
    nice drop
    Peace
    BlueWater:heart:
     
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