Black Poetry : Beacause

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  1. phaZell

    phaZell New Member MEMBER

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    this is just a lil poem i wrote one day.....let me know what yall think

    you first take me away
    from the place which I was born
    hit me with your whips
    till i'm beat and torn
    you try to fix this mistake
    by sending me to my "home"
    but you know I gotta look good
    help me find my comb
    i start to become smarter
    knowing almost as much as you
    you take away my ideas
    saying they were yours and new
    now you want my music
    brought here by my forefathers
    but you can't do it like me
    so why even bother
    we back to where we stared
    you taking me down again
    i just wanna be on your level
    why can't we be friends
    it's finally lookin' good
    you acepting me for me
    but I aint gonna rejoice
    we just gotta wait and see
    it's the new millenium
    i'll never take nothin back
    all of this happened
    just because i'm black
     
  2. Natasha

    Natasha Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :wave: Hello And welcome fellow scribe .......not bad for something you "wrote one day" ;)

    :wave: Look forward to reading more
    Natasha ~ :heart:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    welcome welcome welcome !!!!

    welcome within to da playground of flow
    da house of love and da brightest glow
    da destee crib where we brake bread to be fed
    welcome within upon family & friendz see u be kin.
    so flow on put on a show as we sho love and
    watch ya grow........WELCOME !!:toast: :heart: :)
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    :wave: Haaaaaaaaaaay phaZell :wave:

    ~ Welcome ~ Welcome ~ Welcome ~

    Thank you for joining us and sharing this sweet peace.
    Enjoyed it much and am looking forward to more.
    Please make yourself at home, cause you are! :wink:

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    Destee
     
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    Destee destee.com STAFF

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    ps ... cute name too ... :)
     
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    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    as we struggle to establish an identity.

    WELCOME, P'Zell

    THANKS for the river.

    baller
     
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    Welcome to destee PhaZell, I enjoyed this piece and look forward to hearing more from you!
     
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    Blessings Eternal Unto You
    feelin you here...
    Glad to have you...scribe on!

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