Black Poetry : ...Battle of the Terrible 3's...

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by LiLi, Oct 11, 2002.

  1. LiLi

    LiLi Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    No voice left...

    The screams and cries forced internal by propoganda of civilized mannerisms...a combustible cell of reaching grasping flames..

    And now I feel burnt out...

    All scratching and clawing at steel plates of resistance has left my nails blacked and my facade's shine now lacks luster...

    My giddiness a simpleton's laughter in burps and confused expression...almost invisible as those who I believe see...race through me with breath held and gaze bound...

    The connotation simply irreversible as mouths swell in apathy and misunderstanding and me incredulous as I feel my voice dig deeper down into my gut...my crying and unwinding self...

    Fear or anger or both has rooted me to this place unstable...and my dread of weilding the sword yet again has dampened my spirit all the more...

    This battle has waged for 3 years now...my white flag caught underfoot
    ...prides weight?
    ...honor?
    Perhaps stupidity has found me this willing soldier of strident deeds unpreserved...unrecognized...or perhaps my 3 year old mind throws this tantrum unfamiliar of patience and time...
     
  2. Bittersweet

    Bittersweet New Member MEMBER

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    I have felt this way many times, sometimes I just want to throw my hands up in the air say **** it and walk away cuz I get so tired of fighting and keep going, but something won't let me stop and even take a breath... I like the images you chose.. I think they work really well... and the last line is great, flows well with the rest of the piece
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    hummmm! we all fine self so way or nother in dis mist
    yet we do come around in time ......very nice flow
     
  4. LiLi

    LiLi Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Bittersweet & $$RICH$$ ~ thanks for reading this...i'm glad that you are able to feel me on this. :heart:
     
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    Reason Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Lili

    This is my second time reading this peice and it still leaves me speechless! Such depth!

    Letting it marinate...
    Reas
     
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    OmoObatala Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Three a powerfull number, I am a 3 time survivor (not the game show) and I tell you I have walked that road. It will be difficult but you are strong handle it.......

    can't wait ti see you in 33 years....
     
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