Black Poetry : Battle In the Ocean

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  1. rhymebad

    rhymebad Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Battle In the Ocean

    Write scripts clearly and my ship nearly lost her sails
    in the soft hale storm pulled the rope uplifting them to prevail
    through the shifting gales the wind replies to the skies, tries to escape
    the ship’s anchor mark my rnowned quotes, sharks surrounds my boat great
    fright in my heart will fight til dark goal is to net a fish eat with
    a wet dish of salad this brisk balad played many times as a gift
    its an academic year fish to no limit in here and like Kobe quick
    Even Moby **** maybe present ocean full of emotions and sick
    Pleasures maybe slick treasures underneath dang just threw a brick
    At them sharks still see fins circle in purple this is no cartoon
    Grabbed a harpoon and started to shoot and pollute water with bazaar doom
    The ocean flow lame will proclaim my life aimed my knife
    At the sharks fin bingo like Johnny Ringgo a legit hit very nice
    Other sharks became frightened that ended the fighting and strife
    I woke from sleep sheets wet from sweat it was all a dream so extreme //
    have to stay strap some cats betray rap with tons of guns duck
    lead or get struck in the head hell I can’t digest bullets my luck
    is bad from that aspect, try pay cash for pearls date shy abashed
    Girls they’ll duck a room fill with strangers no thrill when danger flash
    random quotes made me abandon hopes of becoming a rapper
    rumbling through chapters in searh of words left me in laughter
    don’t know the meaning but flow is gleaming here an forevr after
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You didn't abandon ship, but fought to victory. Enjoyed the metaphor, tight write.
     
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    rhymebad Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    THANKS FOR PROPS
     
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    Talent just streamed from the title to the end. Battle in the ocean, so true and inspiring
     
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    rhymebad Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Phenomenon THANKS FOR RESPONDING AND THE PROPS
     
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