Khasm13 : battle in da dungeon...

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  1. Khasm13

    Khasm13 STAFF STAFF

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    in da dark dismal dungeon
    demons of desire
    douse my body
    with liquid fire
    try'n to get me to submit
    each blow is a direct hit
    that leaves me with
    too much blood in my spit
    ancient candles are lit
    make'n this place look more hellish
    these dark damsels are try'n
    to crack me like a shellfish
    with torture
    i'm sorry i even sought the
    forbidden dance
    cause now i'm under
    da night lance
    feeble is my stance
    but i have to summon all my strength
    for a last chance
    for freedom
    there has to be a way to beat em
    and secure my escape
    from dastardly demons filled with massive hate
    locked in dis dusty cage
    my body wind's up into a rage
    and my mind starts compute'n probabalities
    until i'm half crazed
    that's when ms. temptress came in halfed dressed
    to feed me my food
    she was think'n i was too beat down
    to be in da mood
    to fight for mines
    and then God's divine
    strength
    empowered me, i sensed
    when she got at arms length
    i cancelled her account
    then i ran out da cage and hid in da shadows
    get'n my body ready
    for the upcome'n battles
    as they mount...
     
  2. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i like.....i like ....
    the mental....
    strive
     
  3. LovelyGoldenOne

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    tyte...i'm likin' this...
     
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    Khasm, this is dope. I am rollin with your vibe, too, and love the flow. Peace to you.
     
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    islander Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is an incredible poem. It almost sounds like a story out of a science fiction/fantasy book.
     
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    I've fallen prey to the temptations of the forbidden a time or two...and have served a sentence in the dungeon...

    but hey.......your work.......I'm totally feelin, the whole concept,
    imagery, the energy that races through each word...the stage
    you set at the beginning, time, place, sybolism...whoa

    It's :hot:.....def'
     
  7. triniti424

    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    see now why the demon gotta be a chic LoL just kidding...
    I understand the feeling of fighting the endless war of survival...you will succeed... I feel it :)
     
  8. Khasm13

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    thanks fam...
    as ya'll already know
    i gotz my issues...:laugh:
    peace
    khasm
     
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    much love...very tight
     
  10. Khasm13

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    i bring dis back
    so ya'll can think i'm a hater
    for da day
    with da man tease piece
    i flex mad personalitays...lol
    peace
    khasm
     
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