Black Poetry : Barely Breathing

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  1. jus_dat_nice

    jus_dat_nice Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    With every breath my chest tightens
    Barely breathing
    I can't...I can't do it
    Every exhale scoarches my throat
    Sobs stagger through my chest
    Shallow breaths fight through the tears
    Unfaithful lungs fail to comply
    So my heart speaeds in my chest in effort to make up for their infidelity
    And my mind...my mind panics
    Unable to understand
    What makes the walls vanish and the room spin
    Gripping at the air
    I need to hold on...I need
    Reprieve
    It's all his fault
    It's all his fault
     
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    baller Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    my fault...

    okay
    .
    .
    .
    I
    stand
    ready
    To take the blame
    …let you tarnish my name
    If it allows you to breathe
    …to seize each moment of now
    For no matter how…tomorrow comes
    I want it to come…for you
    So
    Calm
    Down
    Hear the beat of your next breath
    Let your heart beat rest
    From its over-worked yesterday
    Listen…as your tears say
    Joy sent me
    That tomorrow might be
    A
    Blessing
    To
    You

    Breathe deeply
     
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    cherryblossom Banned MEMBER

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    This was so deeply poignant! Although it's a sad subject matter, your descriptive language was on point! This also made me think of Toni Braxton's song.
     
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    cherryblossom Banned MEMBER

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    Easy for YOU to say! :court: lol j/k sweet, thoughtufl response, as usual, Baller.
     
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    I courted a man once who was gracious enough to end the relationship only when he 'knew' I could 'breathe.' Many years ago, but I never forgot that small kindness......this poem put me in mind of that relationship.
     
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    jus_dat_nice Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    He allowed me to breathe deeply
    Released the hold he had on my lungs
    And let me take that sweet breath
    Inhale...exhale
    I was in rapture
    In love with the dance of my heart
    And the seduction of my lungs
    Thank you
    For letting me breathe

    AND THANKS FOR READING AND THE WONDERFUL FLOWBACK!!!:em2300:
     
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    jus_dat_nice Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I'm glad my words could take you back to a place and time. I love when my poetry can do that for someone. Thank you so much for reading and for your comments.

    Thank you so much for your comments.
     
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    jus_dat_nice:
    Its so nice to read you again.
    I find it so amazing how you can
    luv someone like this....I know
    for me I ask myself how in the world
    did this happen to me...lol Luving so
    hard, intense, and strong that you feel like the
    air has been removed from your lungs...(signs)

    Lovely Scribe.

    Much Luv
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Agreeing with 4EverLuv, when going through this, you ask yourself how did I get back here, the grip is like a vice. Well expressed.
     
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    jus_dat_nice Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank you for the love
    it's been a while since i wrote anything at all
    this is just my attempt to get it all on paper
    thank you again for reading :)

    thank you so much for your comments
    sometimes you get yourself into situations to the point where you feel as if you can't breathe
    but all you need is a little strength and you can get through anything :)
     
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