Black Poetry : backsliding on my blak (blakverb version)

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by blakverb, May 22, 2001.

  1. blakverb

    blakverb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    *this piece is actually a reply posted under Afri's piece, but, I just wanted to see what the fam thought.So here it is.


    there she is
    monochromatic visions
    among closed eyes
    I hear her voice loud yet soft
    I hear her voice found wet lost
    somewhere in my past
    I no longer have the right map
    so location...unknown
    'cept this vision of mine
    pixelated electrical pulses
    from dendrite to axon to
    fist fight to wax off...on
    waiting...tired of waiting
    my friend aching to be kissed
    by her lips - minor and major -
    'ceps bi- and tri- and forearm and
    palm and mind create a
    synergistic connection that erases
    erections erected when I yearn
    for her...post-op configurations
    comtemplate their shape before
    becumming clouds on blak sheets /
    living this in silence can't take this
    news to the streets / or I'd lose my
    cred...my hand giving me ____trying
    to stay HEAD strong is a waste
    of time this sex
    .............................."pure pantomime"
    and I act as if she is enveloping my
    "Dear Sean" letter / reading it
    as if it's in braille
    I translate with my hands / before
    replying "yes...yes...yes...woman...yes"
    so far outside of myself I forgot
    I was by myself and slapped my
    own *** before I build...
    ...clouds on a blak backdrop.

    (c)2001 blakverb
     
  2. GQ

    GQ Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Extraordinary per usual my brotha!!!

    Peace
    GQ
     
  3. Destee

    Destee destee.com STAFF

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    awwww Blak Man ...
    awwww Man ...
    this is hot!

    :roll:

    Destee
     
  4. wildflower7

    wildflower7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    keep it hot

    yuh set me on fiyah!
    go 'head on!
    -7
     
  5. Amun-Ra

    Amun-Ra Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sweeeet!

    Some ral nice word play here--some double entendre, some mixed rhymes and internal rhymes--I loved it--gives a nice feel and at the same time provokes a few deeper thoughts--Amun-Ra

    :toast:
     
  6. shaz

    shaz Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    deep piece
    but i must find my dictionary before i dare say more.
     
  7. Afridancr

    Afridancr Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Ummmmm hmmmm...

    I'm feeling you!! :wink:
     
  8. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i likes this drop
    tight and hot....
    MR. MIA,
    i think you din got the award for longest MIA
    where you be's at Verb!!!!!!!!
     
  9. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hmmmmm....The feeling of being drawn away so intensely that it takes effort to bring yourself back...deep write here.
     
  10. SwtT

    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :eek: something about that Blak:heart: VERY tight write here:)
     
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