Black Poetry : ~Background Vocals: A Soul On 3rd Street~

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  1. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Seeing cracks in the concrete
    expect less from a rose
    coming out to breathe...
    purple lips dipped
    in disorted dreams
    children sitting on swings
    forcing images while
    jesus sings...

    city lights, shine bright
    on park benches and
    homeless men...
    dark corners suffocate
    suicidals finding answers
    in their wrist...
    ....as cliche as it gets....
    painting regrets with
    a drying pen...

    baggy jeans, *** touching
    a burning back row pew
    watching the preacher
    make a fool out of
    him, her, and you...
    turning the pages
    studying the stern faces
    purses held close
    to their waist and...
    sinners feeling out
    of place, shifting in
    their seats this
    and that a way...and
    once the preacher senses
    he begins pacing...
    hooting and hollering
    but cant recite the
    amazing graces...

    city winds blow calmly
    against broken homes...
    money low, heater off
    frozen toes...
    death being cooked
    over a warm stove...
    a child sitting in a
    far off corner
    staring into sorrow...
    being forced to grow...

    these honey brown eyes
    blood shot deadly
    face caged behind
    a jagged goatee...
    saturated in city debris
    a smell of alcohol when
    i open to breathe...
    poet from the streets
    forcing metaphors and multis
    just to keep a few egos
    happy...

    i write what i live
    **** the rest
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    heavy deep exprssion made
    tyte deep write from da mental
    Mind~Soul
     
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    I enjoyed ya flow poet keep the pen in the zone.
     
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    Poet...
    Your work is so deeply social and introspective...
    it's as if...you've obtained a revelation..."eyes wide open"
    and the only way to see what is real...is through
    the eyes of your words...
    These stanzas were like bolts of lightning, wake up calls
    to the consciousness...and yet a reflection of a
    reality that is heartwrenching and never seems to end
    Yes...there is a dark element to our existence that
    many of us choose to close ourselves to as if it doesn't exist
    but you see...and you see it as it is...

    Encore...

    I am moved by this work,
    Sage​
     
  5. MzBlkAngel

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    I love your work as always...this was deep deep..flow head on....
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Nitty gritty and true oozing out onto paper. It was though there was a camcorder in your mind. Flow on poet.
     
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    You took me along with you every step of the way. This piece is a gift.
     
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    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    masterful....
    from "cracks in the concrete.......' to that final verse...
    i was with you...knowing that energy...feeling that energy
    you got your name right...mind-$oul....the poem encompasses all of that
    masterful
     
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