Black Poetry : Baby Mama Drama

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by krazelyricks, Aug 17, 2004.

  1. krazelyricks

    krazelyricks Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sitting home alone
    Drinking red kool-aid with the sugar on strong
    Wondering where the **** I went wrong
    To have this woman I don't know a thing about sitting across from me with nerves on burn
    As my eyes constantly steal glances at her and yearn
    For a reason why you would want her
    Instead of a dime like me here

    What would make a person go from classy
    To something that [email protected] nasty
    Something with nine inch fingernails and hair tracks dirty
    She's looks over at me slowly
    And I cant take my eyes off her, but I turn slowly
    Still wondering what's her name as my heart races before me

    She came in about an hour ago and said nothing but three words
    "It's a girl"
    No need to explain, who's girl
    I already know, it's of HIM and her
    She looks just like him except for younger
    Dang, if only I was a little wiser
    I would have been left him and let him have her
    But no......I'm here
    Staring at her.....

    "What's your name?" She calmly asks me
    I look at her blinkly
    And tell her "my name is classy
    Something she wouldn't know about, that's me"
    Conversation stops where it started, quickly

    Dang, where is he
    He was suppose to be here about sixty
    minutes early
    I look at my watch and back at the woman sitting over there tirely
    She didn't do anything wrong, why am I mad at her..........dang Casey
    Talk to her......properly!!!!!
    Properly??????????????
    Properly???????
    What is the proper way to talk to a woman who had a baby by your man knowingly
    Not worrying about your marriage presently

    She looks over at me again
    This time I put a fake smile on as if I was her friend
    Knowing good god [email protected] well I just want this to end
    And rid me of the pain that I feel towards this THING on the floor in front of her, my man's KIN
    Dang, where do I pick these men?????

    "You want something to eat?"
    I ask the FREAK-A- LEAK
    She says "yes, I would like something to eat."
    I roll my eyes at her and go into the kitchen all the while keeping my eyes on her, as she looks down in defeat
    The nerve of this broad, coming to my house unannounced with that THING, I'm in a heat
    CALM DOWN GURL, BEAT DA HEAT!!!!!!!!!!!!

    I bring back the food and finally I get a good look at her and the baby
    It looks good for a baby
    Dang, but it's by he
    My man................he.......


    Then the door opens.......

    to be continued...................
     
  2. Muse

    Muse Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :argue: <<<the vibe I woulda been reppin in that situation , lol. But on the real i'm biting my nails waitin' on tha continuation! Lovin dis hea!!
     
  3. SwtT

    SwtT Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Man!!!1 This was tight....I'm just sittin here, loving the way you flowed.


    now, I'll just wait for part 2
     
  4. jazzymoonchild

    jazzymoonchild Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wow!! and whoa! You mean you ain't on the news yet???

    I'm staying tuned in......
     
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    alli can say is this is tight..flow it sis!!!!
     
  6. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You tell a story really really well, sister. Lookin forward to the continuation.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    wow!! awesome scribing u open up on dis one
     
  8. angelicsage

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    mmmm, this really pulls you in
    love the way you created the
    tension between the two...
    Great write and Great read...

    We def' need to get that continuation...soon ok...lol

    This was tyte...
    and so "womanlike"...if ya know what I mean
     
  9. triniti424

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    *sippin on my tea* mmmmmm nah uhhhhhhhhhhhhhh
    THEN WHAT HAPPENED :read: :read: :look: :D
    Ok sista i am patiently waiting *gettin restless already* for the next one :huh:
     
  10. krazelyricks

    krazelyricks Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks fam for the luv....I really appreciate it....the next piece will be comin' out soon......I promise. :wink:
     
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