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Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by poeticlyspeakin, Feb 25, 2005.

  1. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I wish
    I could slow myself
    And move to your rhythm
    I listen
    Needless to say
    I'm speechless
    Women would kill
    for your beauty
    for your wisdom
    And I would die
    to be a part of it
    Because
    you are everything
    I am not
    And thats what makes me
    want you even more
    makes me fall
    knowing nothing is there to catch me
    Because I want to take risks
    when I hear you
    I want to be everything
    I know I wont be
    In fact I try to be
    and thats probably my first mistake
    But you can make butter
    feel like sandpaper
    I stutter when Ive practiced
    the one line for two hours
    And I trip when Im looking at the ground
    Because I lose any ounce of smoothness
    when you speak my name
    Therefore I can't be like Lebron
    Run game
    But then again
    I havent tried to
    Because there's something about
    your maturity
    that made me want you
    Before I knew I could have you
    And this is what scares me the most.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    deep emotions crossing
    feeling u on this
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Being willing to fall for someone and willing to take that risk, I felt this and your words ring out true. Wonderfully written flow poet.
     
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    Speak It!

    (Poetically)
     
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    phenomenalwoman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Just the title drew me in and [email protected] I am glad I took the time to read it. those are some deep emotions, beautifully posed
     
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    Versatile Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wowwwwwwwwwww.....I LOve it alot
     
  7. Akilah

    Akilah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you Poet...

    This was such a sweet and honest flow...
    I'm really feeling the vulnerability, frustration,
    longing for, and the beginning sparks of love... EXCELLENT !

    Much
    Peace & Love
    Akilah
    :read:
     
  8. plainrhythm

    plainrhythm Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    WOW...
    poet, i am....
    WOW....
    this, this is just so...
    WOW...
    i don't even have the words...
    WOW...
    i mean, i am...
    WOW...
    shocked!
    this is amazingly charming! so sweet so...
    WOW! :welldone: :welldone: :welldone: :welldone: :welldone: :welldone:
     
  9. poeticlyspeakin

    poeticlyspeakin Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i appreciate tha love

    sorry it took me so long to reply, but im glad u can feel my flow. much luv n respect... peace.
     
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