Black Poetry : At the Graves of Friends

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Jelly, Dec 9, 2005.

  1. Jelly

    Jelly Member MEMBER

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    When you heard the murmurs,
    the talk of death and pain,
    you waved them aside as common rumors
    and pulled the covers up again.

    When you heard the staccato sound
    of the thousands of boots marching by,
    you sat and wondered: To where were they bound?
    but didn't bother to ask them why?

    When you heard the name
    cried out in voices that swell,
    you never questioned his fame
    and, instead, hid deeper in your shell.

    When you saw with your eyes
    the destruction of a culture
    you finally began to realize
    the dimness of the future.

    Yet you did nothing,
    you waited,
    and did nothing.

    Besides, you thought, they deserved to be hated,
    Now, as by friends graves, roses you lay
    guilt washes over you,
    and silently you pray.

    But whats done is done.
    A lesson taught to you by the past,
    so you swear on the graves of friends newly gone,
    that this time will be the last.

    The covers have now been lifted
    the shell at your feet lay in pieces
    the rumors are being sifted
    to protect you nephews and nieces.
     
  2. Khasm13

    Khasm13 STAFF STAFF

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    word....now thas what i'm talking bout
    thas some deep ish there and was well prosed...

    keep flowin poet...
    one love
    khasm
     
  3. Bluewater

    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    HI Jelly
    dag i'm like wow
    as i was reading yur poem it was at this point I froze
    When you saw with your eyes
    the destruction of a culture
    you finally began to realize
    the dimness of the future.

    isn't it so sad, that right before your eyes
    you see so much fallen it is painful
    Yet you did nothing,
    you waited,
    and did nothing.

    You have given so much in your scribe
    it is filled with wisdom crying out
    Stop this Craziness
    Much love poet I could go on and on
    I see and feel the message in this drop
    We got to live and learn

    Peace To You
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    awesome drop Jelly..........keep it coming word up !
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Not only do we need to open our eyes but our minds as well. This was on point poet.
     
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    nevar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    jelly i felt the emotion in this poem and i want to say what you written has me thinking twice for me to embrace the ones we love. flow on poet from Nevar:spinstar:
     
  7. Jelly

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    Thank you so much for your comments, I really appreciate them. Its' funny how we can all make excuses for not getting involved, or being aware until its' too late. I hope each one of us take a more proactive stance in our lives.
     
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    PatriceCQueen Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i want to say something but those other people who read it already said it best

    So Kudos to you

    Keep writing

    Patrice

    Peace
     
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    Jelly, I commend you on this great work of art.

    Peace to you.
     
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    PLATINUMILLITY1 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    WOOOOOOOOOOOOOWWWW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    THIS WUZ DEEP FA REAL FA REAL!!!!!!!!
    I LOVE THIS
    GOOD WORK KEEP IT UP!!!!
     
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