Quiet Poetry Lounge : AT DA ALTAR

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  1. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    At da altar to shed light
    from my darken of night
    where hearts take in flyte
    to a felt love that's right

    I kneel upon an alter of temptation
    where fantasy & desires call of me
    out of devotion i weep from da offer
    the rise my swollen inhibition to a
    ransom love my body numb in stilliness

    temperment of an fleeting moment
    intimate deception in nakeness i glair
    believing eyez i stare in yearning bliss
    looking into a past of no return i burn
    this passion da whispering notes i hear
    my love aim wit no fear only that i care
    i took her hand as we stand partake in
    kiss of lips in pure immodesty

    let the nobel truth be heard for tainted
    honesty of love & vow i stood at da altar
    upon a beauty a love sweet & fruity
    sheer grace has place us here i kneel to
    vow my loyality and compassion of heart
    to make a stand of compromises and care
    spoken vision my soul will bare
    stain all pain unsure but i will forever be
    true and lay honor and respect for in the
    heart it's kept my love unto beloveth i giveth
    and vow at this altar unconditionally

    I knew this day would come and i
    would knoweth of thee one
    i find to cherish as jems of lost
    treasure and give all my extreme
    pleasure upon , if she accept my vow
    i'll be happy i know she is love, i heard
    it in her voice of choice in words
    i de wed and protect of beloved
    as strings of harps pull at my spirit
    the soul fly free and my heart is her's
    she has stolen all i have i and i won't
    complaint, i won't complaint at da altar
    :sand: :hearts4: :kiss2: :hearts4: :sand:

    A revisit revised from a poem i wrote in 99

    A Dyamondluv Revisualized
    Nu~wave ~Ink creation 05
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I believe I read that other poem...it was a piece you wrote for a poet, a sista who was getting married at that time, correct? Well, this rewrite is beautiful, and who wouldn't accept a vow this sweet and genuine? This was warm and loving.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    yes i did write it for a sista who was about to be wed from here
    at destee.com seem like yesterday because i remember this poem well
    to revise it thank you for those sweet kind words watz..........................
     
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    Tha-Emissary Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yes sir, Bringing that new fire to matrimony. This is rich flow folk!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    thank you very much .......Tha-Emissary it's only there new waves made
     
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    I was not fortunate enough to reas the first version of this beautiful poem but I do know vows this beautiful deserve to be revisited by all of us who claim to be real lovers. Write on Rich write on.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    thank you soulful2006 ......true love of vowz in grace is a place
    hearts lone to go and be i someday will have the pleasure to speak
    these words to a beloveth queen to share my foreverness with ......

    maybe i can find the first one and bring it back let me check !
     
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    Please do b/c I really want to read it. Now that i think of it I used to visit this site when I was a younger poet and I specifically reading something else of yours about a fireplace and I do remember it being very passionate and something I fell in love almost instantly. I think that's why although we've never met I feel like I know you. I had read your poetry and known of you before you got the chance to know me. Isn't it funny how the course of life brings people together?
    Oh feel free to call me Alicia or Licia, soulful2006 is kind of long to type, or at least I think it is.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    wow ......u remember that piece i did sometime ago you are correct
    i did do one about a fireplace it was red hot and very passionate too
    i'll fine it by tomorrow i have so many poems i have to shift through it all
    thankz for the request to bring it back ..
     
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    my pleasure I'm sure somebody else would benefit from it b/c I got real passion out of a former lover with that one about the fireplace and the sequel got me a sequel lol.....
     
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