Black Poetry : Ashamed

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  1. lpoet

    lpoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Baby due in November trying not
    To remember the abortion I talked
    Her into just last December and
    Now I find myself praying for
    My unborn daughter health when
    Less than a year ago I took her
    Breath away, I took her
    First steps, and tears away
    I selfishly begged my girl to
    Sign the papers to let the doctor
    Rip my flesh my flesh and blood away
    And I know that today is a brighter day
    But somehow the cold tools touching my girls
    Legs as she lie on the bed run back and forth
    Through my head and inside the feeling of
    Rejoicing after the horrid deed was done and
    On that day I realize now that I slipped
    Away from my Father and
    The devil had won
    I’m still ashamed
    Wondering,
    What have I become?
     
  2. elayne.

    elayne. Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    lp.


    wow... these are powerful words, my friend.
    the intensity silenced me... & at the same
    time i feel inclined to tell you that it takes a
    strong man to even admit to being ashamed.

    what have you become? only you can answer
    that completely... no one else has the right to
    judge you. (so don't let them) but the scribe
    alone lets me know... you have grown... are
    growing. please... continue. :)

    itsallLove, chile.

    elayne.
     
  3. lpoet

    lpoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank u elayne
     
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    wildflower7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    you have become enlightened with the knowledge that
    few care less to have, and those that do, flinch from the
    pain of it...
    you need to forgive yourself... you are growing (it's in the scribe)
    and please, enjoy your new baby (i know you will) -7:spinstar:
     
  5. LiLi

    LiLi Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    wow hun...that's heavy and that particular situation is something that you never forget...BUT...as ms. elayne. stated your scribe is proof of your growth.

    this is a wonderful peice.
     
  6. lpoet

    lpoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank u so much for the heartfelt replys LiLi and wildflower
     
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    brotherman Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    dammmmm. dude this was truly touching....peace upon your mind, heart, soul and upon the scribe...there is life even in death and I think that your words give life to all those contemplating this very day, and won't because of the life born in your flows...luv.
     
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    oh queen, this is very deep. to echo elayne only you can answer who you have become (or who ever this poem is about). this is definitely heavy. peace

    blak
     
  9. lpoet

    lpoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    blakverb did you really just say "oh queen"

    cause ah i'm a man but thanks for the response anyways
    lol
     
  10. Aaliyahmonet

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    U were very honest and direct 2 da point. I like dat in yo poems lonelypoet.

    May god bless u:)

    Aaliyahmonet
     
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