Black Poetry : as i lay

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  1. thepoetsean

    thepoetsean Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    as i lay
    earth-funky
    the day's laborious remains
    scraped through my active mind

    I lay stroking her head
    she lay fast asleep in my lap
    soon before stained by water thrown upon herself
    showering herself

    she lay--tired.

    i lay--
    contemplatory* in a sense
    stroking her hair--
    feeling her skin...
    happily
    even though

    we lay

    growing apart--
    insecurities ring true
    bell tolling in the pits of my heart
    the rest is just to occur

    we lay
    knowing we might never again

    i lay--
    earth-funky
    the days remains staining my face--
    with the water i throw upon it--
    from within myself...
    ..........showering
    ...............myself

    thinking how life will be--

    i lay--
    quite confounded--
    confused--
    puzzled--

    i lay knowing--
    she doesn't love me.


    sean.

    wurdplai

    thehardestthingisknowing*
     
  2. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Knowing....isn't as hard ....

    when ya' have skillz like you do...!!
    Brotha I dig your
    earth-funky depth
    which is a reflection/noitcelfer
    of a YOU that is to say you are quite
    the poetic laureate!!

    Lovin' this tyght flow~~!!
     
  3. GQ

    GQ Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Yeah Sean,

    It's most def "earth funky" like that!!! Excellent piece!!!

    Peace
    GQ
     
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    GA_Sunshyne Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    SEAN....

    i know they are just NOT ready for you!!
    (& you know what i mean)

    boy! if you don't stop mesmerizing me!! :)

    *forevafeelinyourflow*

    AlwaysLove...
    Sunshyne~
     
  5. thepoetsean

    thepoetsean Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks y'all

    so much for readin' whut i write!
     
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    alyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    must agree with

    GA Sun...

    this is monumental, brotha sean!

    a
     
  7. MapleXtract

    MapleXtract Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You just don't know...

    ...how much I love your, "wurdplai." You give off this sensational poetic essence. *Always enthralled*. Keep it goin', pa... :roll:
     
  8. thepoetsean

    thepoetsean Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    A and Maple...

    not a day goes by that I don't appreciate you guys. Thanks for the read.

    sean
     
  9. poeticdelight

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    *crying*

    this i give a very good rating

    you are good!

    -pd
     
  10. thepoetsean

    thepoetsean Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    poeticdelight

    i am glad that u think so highly of it!

    crying :(( (tears of joy)

    sean.