Poetry Critiques : Are You....(copy)

MzBlkAngel

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somewhere ova da rainbow....
Are you that man?
The one…are you
The one that was sent from above
One who wishes to share his love?
….with me
Are you the one?
Who will be my infinity?
My light my gift from above
Are you the man?
That will wipe my tears
And hold my fears?
Rain or shine
Are you the one?
That will cherish me?
Handle with tender care?
Let me be a woman?
Won’t stop me from growing?
Are you the one?
Am I want you looking for or
…..Just time to spend?
I may not be what you think you need
See, I got needs I have desires
I have dreams to reach
Will you take that search
……….With me?
Deal with my emotions?
Complete me in my soul form?
Hold me close at night?
And during the day?
Are you the one?
Carry me when I can’t carry myself?
Find me when I am lost?
And love me for me?
Are you the one?
Will you say
…………. I do?
and hold that bond?

See for me, I don’t want a chapter
I want a book…
Pages of us written
Shaped from our love
And copy written no duplications
That one of a kind love thang
A love that came out the blue
Are you the one?

(C) 2005
untitled life
new vision
 
mba...this was a lovely pondering piece right here...you set the mood of the piece with the first couple of lines....

Are you that man?
The one…are you
The one that was sent from above
One who wishes to share his love?


and this main thought is carried out through the entire poem...the vibe was really felt because i believe we all have questions about a new person that steps into our lives...are they just a walk in the park or a partner for life...the only thing that i would change is the title...i would have it be entitled are you the one...it makes more sense to me...wonderful write sis...

one love
khasm
 

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