Poetry Critiques : Are We So Different?

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by trupoeticempres, Apr 24, 2006.

  1. trupoeticempres

    trupoeticempres Member MEMBER

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    You look at us as if
    We are creatures of the unknown
    Focusing on our skin the color the tone
    Are we so different,
    Because we are black?
    Or are you afraid of our minds
    And don't know how to react
    Afraid of our intellect
    and the knowledge we obtain
    Trying to limit our opportunities
    Keeping us restrained
    But we can not be held down
    Always in pursuit of our golden crown
    Leaving our mark up this great Earth
    Showing what we are made of
    Displaying our worth
    Look at us and you will notice
    That we are the same
    Our skin is a different color
    That can not be changed
    Are we so different?

    Hope you all enjoy this one. Im new to the fam, so please hit me up with honest replies. Much love :smooch: thanks
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    This poem was powerful and well created i love how
    you versed it , it would have been nice to read this in
    a few stanza , it would have made this piece even stronger

    This was a very good poem that hit major point of reality
    thanks for sharing it
    welcome to Destee.com of peace and respect
    welcome to the house of loving and sharing
     
  3. trupoeticempres

    trupoeticempres Member MEMBER

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    thank you , i will take that into consideration
     
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    Sefirot Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Excellent read. I would like to answer with an emphatic and resounding "YES" on all accounts :)
     
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    MyTlita Active Member MEMBER

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    You definitely have a way with words. I am really feeling this poem. Thank you for sharing your thoughts.
     
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