Black Poetry : Anyone But You

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Euphoria, Apr 24, 2002.

  1. Euphoria

    Euphoria Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You and I could be so perfect together,
    One of those couples that are meant to last forever,
    You could be my lover, my soulmate, my one,
    I could be your everything, your world, and your sun,
    We'd read each other's mind, know every feeling and every touch,
    I'd know our future's together, coz I'd love you so much,
    You'd make promises and I'd believe every word you say,
    You'd hold me and kiss me, I'd love you more every day,
    It is possible you could become my everything and more,
    All you have to do is change everything you are.

    22/4/02
    *Emma*
     
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    alyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    ooooh oooh ooooooh!!!!!!! I do love the twist on this! Excellent piece!

    alyce
     
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    lpoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    im really feelin this here and like alyce said i to like the twist at the end

    great scribe
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    dizzzzzzammmmm!! now ya rockin in a curve mold......liking dis
     
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    msluciousb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Tell it girl!

    Excellent! I didn' t see the ending coming.
    I like that "twist" as the other's say.
    Keep us coming back for more!
    BLESSING ON YA HOUSE!:toast:
     
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    Bert Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hate to admit how many times I've heard this. :D
    Good flow, tell the truth.

    Bert
     
  7. Euphoria

    Euphoria Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks everyone for your comments. I really appreciate the love. I'm glad you like the twist, it was my 2 second flash of genius... though they occur once in a blue moon. :)
    I was actually thinking of this really gorgeous guy that I hooked up with one night, we looked great together, but on the inside, he's not as beautiful as I'd hoped.

    *Emma*
     
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    Desert Storm Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sometimes can't alwayz be changin peeps

    Feelin me sis! (shruggin ma shoulder)
    Love this one.
    Drifting,,,
    And thinking about how many people I wish I could change.
    Loved this one.
    Desert Storm

    P.S. sometimes the best thing ya can do is change ya self
    Some food for thought
     
  9. NittyGrit

    NittyGrit Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this exemplifies the practice of poetry at its finest

    please excuse the gasp that escaped me and the startled expression on my brow as my eyes traversed the last two lines.

    my emotions need time to recover.

    Excellent penmanship
    NittyGrit
     
  10. Euphoria

    Euphoria Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Desert Storm - I'm glad you liked my piece. I know you can't change everyone and I don't want to, that's why I pick carefully who my friends are and who I date. Nor do I believe that anyone should ever change for anyone else, myself included, they should instead change because they want to. Thanks for the read.

    NittyGrit - Wow! Thank you so much, that is the bigges compliment I have ever received. I'm going to smile all day now thanks to you. Thank you again. :) see smiling!

    *Emma*
     
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