Black Poetry : Another Time... Another Place

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  1. Heartbeat

    Heartbeat Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    At another time
    In another place
    I would hold your hand
    I would kiss your face

    Our souls would touch
    Long after our bodies cooled down
    We would love each other gratefully
    Happily
    Eternally
    But you and I
    Were not to be

    Had the stars been just right
    Had the moon for us been full
    We would have been lovers
    The kind of lovers
    Only lovers understand
    You would have been my woman
    I would have been your man

    But nothing can remain
    From what never really was
    There’s no evidence of us
    Not the slightest trace
    So awesome would be our love
    At another time
    In another place

    BE
     
  2. MsDLite

    MsDLite Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    beauty!

    your poems
    take on a life
    of their own...

    realism~
     
  3. N2urSoul

    N2urSoul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    BE

    You write the words that make readers say, "hmmmmm."

    Great read.

    N2
     
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    alyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    another

    example of your skills...like a painter, you scribe portraits with living words. Like a sculptor, you mold your subjects with haunting phrases...

    This piece is my definition of "exquisite pain"...and like MsD and N2 have so aptly stated, this poem lives, and causes the reader to say "hmmmmm".... I meditate upon each line, but especially these:

    But nothing can remain
    From what never really was
    There’s no evidence of us
    Not the slightest trace



    Like Shakespeare, you bring out the strongest emotions of ill-fated love. The most unspeakable kind of tragedy....to have nothing to show for love....

    hmmmmm, Poet


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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    ringing in new love

    simply beautiful BE.......just love how u come in da house!!!
     
  6. Heartbeat

    Heartbeat Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you Poets. Happy New Year.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    AND

    A beautiful lovely happy safe new year too u my brutha :) :toast:
     
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    this rings so true for me today...thanks for this one poet...

    one.
     
  9. UbZoRbShUn

    UbZoRbShUn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    your poetry takes on a whole meaning within itself. I like the way you wrap me up and pull me close with "Our souls would touch and we would love each other gratefully" ..... Check ya mail





    One
     
  10. Bert

    Bert Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Somebody once told me

    the dream itself is worth it all and if we get a chance to live one moment of it....welll! Or something to that affect. This is awesome, brotha. From the heart of passion. I can relate.

    BRB
     
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