Black Poetry : And We Said Nothing

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  1. jus_dat_nice

    jus_dat_nice Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    It's probably not going to be that greatly because I'm just writing the first thing that comes to mind at the moment so bear with me...

    Our conversations are always fill to the brim
    Us acting up or just acting out
    Or us crying about past loves and past sins
    But for once, we said nothing
    Nothing at all
    And for some reason that was exactly what we both needed to hear

    Our sillyness paused if only for a moment or two
    And we listened to each other breathe
    And let our minds digest our food for thought
    In that fleeting moment your silence eased the pain I didn't know I have
    Your dried my unshed tears before they could fall
    And relief washed over me

    And just that quickly, the moment passed and you spoke again
    "That was nice"
    Yeah, it was
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    seem like when silent comes about and then to hear again makes it all feel good
    i like this how it floats and to think this came right off ya head too....flow on !
     
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    wow this was an ecellent write poet and to think this will improptu. Way to let your pen flow
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    "And we said nothing"
    ...moved you to a point to say something...about saying NOTHING ...is very powerful indeed! ...and I can surely relate to it :bowdown: :bowdown:
     
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    Sometimes the best and most intense of conversations are those with zero words exchanged! Just BEING takes on a whole different meaning!!!!

    Great flow poet!!!
     
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    sweet apple*pie Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Nice

    I enjoyed this....silence is a most pleasurable thing at times....

    think of how many wonderful things take place in silence....

    The rising of the sun, flowers growing, snow falling, babies in the womb growing...

    And your love....


    lovely write
     
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    as we bask in the beauty of each other...

    without words.

    blessed quiet.

    NICE.
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Being so special to one another that neither of you felt the need to speak, just being with each other was all that was needed. Off the top of your head was just...perfect.
     
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    Da Street So'ja Banned MEMBER

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    um

    the best stuff comes from right "at the moment"
    it's pure not planned

    and your story was great it put me there as a spectator

    you when you can do that it's real

    peace

    yeah it was nice
     
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    jus_dat_nice Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    THANKS!!!

    $$RICH$$: Thanks for the compliment. Silence can sometimes be exactly what you need.

    asimplepoet: Thank you. I try my best.

    queenstswana: thank you for the love. Nothing can sometimes be the most powerful thing you can say.

    LovesDestiny: exactly. That was the very point of the poem. Thank you for reading.

    sweet apple*pie: you're right sis the best things DO take place in the silence because thier greatness is enough.

    baller: thank you i think you've got it

    watzinaname: thank you for the comment. we are very special to each other but i guess that's obvious.

    Da Strret So'ja: thank you for the love. i guess the spur of the moment writes can be the best ones.
     
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