Black Poetry : and now you're gone..........

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  1. LURK

    LURK Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    peep it
    :(


    would you do the same
    for me as i do for you?
    or would you coward at
    the way i do
    this thing for you?

    A kiss-
    baby hits me with those lips
    right here:love:
    smack in the middle of my forehead
    for my soul's dead...

    I've been thinkin' of a-a-askin' you...
    "would you do the same for -uh umm--
    for me as i do for you..??
    :(
    I'm honestly not sure if you will-
    my pain is through.....

    your eyes use to light up
    when I walked into the room
    with you waiting for me at the door
    now you don't even glance anymore...

    I felt
    my cards were dealt
    when I saw you--
    A 'queen' to my existence
    your energy, so rawful...

    we bopped to romance-
    and the beat
    of our hearts like true hip hop heads
    took a step forward
    took a crazy chance
    and went str8 ahead....it was sweet...

    without a wicked doubt-
    my blues are now coming out
    I Loved you
    :heart:
    your voice soft spoken
    always kept my heart open...

    brought my mind to a level
    where I seen....
    all the beautiful things
    between red(blood) and green(money)....
    Lifes' colors brightened up to me
    seasons had to heighten up to me(yearly high)
    I'm so pitifully missin' you
    missin' us......just why couldn't we be....???
    :confused:

    maybe it was Jane(Mary)-
    at least it wasn't 'cane(coke)-
    like a calendar in the trash
    a year went faster than it came..............

    and when it left-
    i slowly heard them drops of rain...
    foreshadowin'
    the end of this wet drenched campaign...
    of your grabholdin'....

    Love's bliss
    shoot don't miss...
    starsstruck got my heart [email protected]
    this is it........you're gone....

    ****....
    just like that....

    and you're gone....

    :(
    copyright2002 Da Commission Records
     
  2. k0k0

    k0k0 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    its amazing how u can read anothers words, and feel like they wrote your story.

    Love's bliss
    shoot don't miss...
    starsstruck got my heart [email protected]
    this is it........you're gone....

    that hit home. thanks for the read..
     
  3. $$RICH$$

    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    felt dis one down deep
    ya vibe is hittin' sweet
    flow on poet!
     
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    lurk.


    where you been hidin' at?!! :)

    i enjoyed the read... & felt the sentiment
    behind the words. when i got to the end
    i said... "****. sometimes... it's just like that."

    thanks for sharing.

    alwayspeace,
    elayne.
     
  5. j'hiah

    j'hiah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    "let her go" is always my sentiments to feelings like these...

    tyte read..
     
  6. Kitana

    Kitana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    from the depth of this poem I get the the feeling that there is a lot of pain in the words you have written...the "what ifs" will drive you crazy if you don't let them go...

    K
     
  7. LURK

    LURK Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    no doubt yall!!
    thanx for tha feedback as always Rich,koko,j-hiah,and kitana...
    i appreciate da love...and honesty j'hiah!!!!

    whassup elayne!
    i've been away workin on my album..
    that piece was actually an excerpt from it...
    im back now though...u kno on and off...



    one
     
  8. NittyGrit

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    like a calander in the trash....

    what a powerful phrase!!!!

    I'm really diggin' this one

    NittyGritt ReddClay
     
  9. lpoet

    lpoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    yup

    nice drop
     
  10. LURK

    LURK Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    had ta bring it back...

    nittygrit-thanx for da luv man...
    where ya been-ya gotta drop sumthin hot again man.....!!
    lpoet-i feel ya...this poem is my closure on da situation....but goodlookin'....

    one
     
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