Black Poetry : ....An unfinished woman

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  1. mkhaya lo'

    mkhaya lo' Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I lie here
    on my back.
    sweating,
    smelling.
    Niether woman...niether girl.
    stuck.
    tears roll down the side of myeyes...stupid!...stupid!...stupid me!

    forever has begun, my sad story has just found its beginning.
    I'm cold.
    I'm freezing.
    the window is open, the thin curtain is blowing inside out, the cold wind dries me.
    I here the cars outside, hooting and angry driver indulging in road rage...to them I'm just a dimmly lit window...the silence fools them into ignorance.

    I have no energy to scream..I don't want to scream...I want a reason. A reason to myself, a reason to stand 20 years from today.

    I am unfinished woman..with no reason and no cause...my next step is inside my mind. To move on and far and away and from and here..to be free from
    questions with no answers, from judgements with no justice, from stares with no mercy.

    I am an unfinished woman...
     
  2. poeticdelight

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    enjoyed the read

    keep flowin

    pd
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    tyght scribe u speaketh from inside ... do yo thang !
     
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    This! Is the most intense poem I've read in a minute. You capture the frustations and emptiness of a lot of women I have been meeting lately- without doubt this is a serious issue and I have advocated and will keep advocating that one solution is making it legal for a man to have more than one wife. This sounds crass until you do the math and realize that even if you paired one man to one woman you'd still be left with a huge surplus of 'unfinished woman'. Beautifully written!

    JAH Lives.
     
  5. mkhaya lo'

    mkhaya lo' Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Words well thought off....YeshuJah! How much do you know about the issue of polygamy?
    Here in Africa, and in South Africa indeed, its normal practice in some more traditional rural tribes to still have a man with more than one wife. I know people who have brothers and sisters from different mothers and the same father. THe issue is as much ego boosting as it is problematic. Esapcially when the man dies. There's the issue of the chief wife, her children and then the next wife and her children...and so on...But as a matter of interest, there's a Royal tribe here in South Africa. A woman is one of the prominent leaders in that tribe. She's called Queen Modjaji the "rain queen" she supposedly has power to control rain. I don't believe it. Many call me too westernised for the lack of that belief.

    Anyway, the Rain Queen marries other women, but she doesn't come together with them. They actually become the 'wives' of the man chosen to be her husband. she marries other women on behalf of her husband. they procreate, keep the home fires burning and do other 'wivey' things. And the Queen, well, she's free to do what ever she wants to do, she has no obligations to the man! And this is normal customary practise. Of course its not recognised by the law but most traditional practises are not recognised by the law. Its interesting to say the least.

    lo'
     
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    This read required some meditation on my part...chewing slowing. There was so much to dwell on in this little poem and I certainly did not want to miss it. There are many unfinished women and this poem so accurately express the emotions of many of them. You had to be in a zone of some kind when you were writing this.

    Personally, I did not gather that this unfinished woman, expressed a need to be married or have a boyfriend in order to be finished. Maybe I missed something. However, I did not miss this. The unfinished woman in this poem is oppressed (mentally and spiritually) and seeks to be free from the system of things in life. Anyway, thanks for sharing this piece. You are unique in style and expression.

    So you are from South Africa?
     
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    You are such a wealth of information for many of us who will never visit, read, or otherwise educate ourselves about these ancient practices in African culture. Thank you for bringing your spices to the table.

    I thoroughly enjoyed the read and the responses.

    Alyce :heart:
     
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    mkhaya lo' Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I am humbled at the constant positive vibes that the poets on this forum have towards each other-indeed it is my pleasure to let you peep into Africa's window!!!! Its amazing that though we miles apart, it doesn't feel like it....yes Joyce I am from South Africa.

    lo'
     
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    as blakverb writes, "classic".
    this is more than classic poetry this is life at it's deepest.
    this touches even the soul of a man where we relate.
    i don't know what's the reason behind this one, but it fits all aspects.

    keep giving me 411 in Africa. i didn't know about the rain queen.
    that's wack though.

    nfinite
    jh.
     
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    Up from the basement a classic...

    A very moving piece. I always enjoyed the feel of realness when reading your work.


    feelin'itsouldeep!
    Coco:dance:
     
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