Black Poetry : ~An Intro After Death~

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  1. Mind~$oul

    Mind~$oul Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    a lil keystyle i did last night before i went to bed, you gotta work with me on it cause i was drunk when i did it...it's not really finish, and i dont think i can add more to it...



    somebody once told me
    a darker night brights a
    brighter day...
    i was a boy then
    shy of 17 years...strong....i've learned to trust
    my own sayings...



    that was an intro to
    a poem i wrote for you
    a few years ago...
    now i'm 19 years
    strong...

    he stuck death into
    his viens...
    i watched as ecstacy ran
    across his face...
    i should have went first!
    i wouldnt be here today!
    you got greedy and
    stole the next
    dose...
    your eyes rolled back
    and your body
    lost control...

    "percy!"
    "percy noo!"

    i grabbed your
    hand...
    you foamed out the mouth
    and pissed in
    your pants...
    so high i was
    i snatched the air
    and in my palms
    i believed i had
    your soul...
    too strung out
    i didnt know...
    while i was holding
    your hand...you decided
    to go...
    to a place we so
    relentlessly debated
    over...
    you..a
    muslim brother...
    me...a
    atheist wanderer...
    i'll impatiently sit back and
    await my
    turn...
    as you tried your best to tell
    me why you believe in
    god for...
    once you finished you'll look at me
    and ask do i now believe
    stubbornly, i parted my lips to
    say no...


    two homeless
    kids...
    a 16 and 17 year old
    drug addict...escapin a
    family of addicts
    who didnt give
    a ****...
    this is my
    agonizing bliss...

    when it got cold
    we'd break into
    that old library...
    and fall in love with
    fine words and
    storytelling...
    those words
    oh how they went through
    my soul like new life
    fu*k drug
    rehab...
    those beautiful words
    seemed to clear the running noses
    a fiend seems to always have...


    april 9th, 2001
    just as the sky
    was becoming
    a blue...
    you died in my arms
    and i think i died (you took my soul)
    with you...
    i've been clean
    since then...
    but now days
    i find myself
    urging...
    for one more
    blow...

    your funeral was
    something awful...
    i stood away
    on my own...
    and just let
    my thoughts go...


    i cant finish...
     
  2. gempis

    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    My god, I'm speechless. This is incredibly touching in its rawness. I don't know if you need to add anything, Mind, but I do want to say how honored I am that you chose to share this with us. Peace, blessings and love to you.
     
  3. the_story

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    whoa man this touched me, it was 2 deep, man
    much love,
    -story
     
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    you don't have to finish cause i think we're all feeling you already...this was very moving...i'm sorry for your loss. much love
     
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    wow man...
    i don't even know what to say...
    whateva you was sip'n on
    let me know...
    cause whateva it was
    it opened you up...
    tight @ss scribe
    peace
    khasm
     
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    wow this was some deep emotions and an even deeper
    passage of pain, friendship and sorrow...
    I'm feeling you...I think you finished this piece...
    I pray you find peace with your past...
     
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    wow...this was deep
    and touchin...
    i am truely speechless...wow
     
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    even unfinished this was the :bomb:
    what a tale you told my brotha
     
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    felt dis deep scribe here
    ya mental was way down into it
    whoaaaaaaa!!!
     
  10. the_story

    the_story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    man i had this AGAIN in order to get the full affect
    this is truly tyte.
    much love,
    -story
     
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