Black Poetry : an illusion

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  1. daroc

    daroc Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this illusion keeps plaguing my mind
    the thouts of a child
    are gradually deteriorating my goals
    but it shoudnt have happnd
    any of it
    period
    i broke my abistinence
    for this bull ish
    dam.......
    but i cant tell the future
    b4 i make it
    only sit here and wish i could
    but i tried
    i tried to prevent all this
    this illusion
    its takin ova my mental
    f-in wit my emotional capabilities
    its cloggin up my freedom pores
    but i aint ginna let this control me
    this illusion
    the illusion of me not being wat i want 2 b
    all because i chose to let him slide his thing in me
    a risk i chose to take
    was protected
    but when he came
    we found that the condom decided to break
    and now all sorts of thots
    r running races on my brain
    lap after lap
    relay after relay
    game and game
    and each time
    in each race
    i loose
    i keep hoping its all jus an illsuion
    a dream
    a blessin in disguise
    a warning from my past to protect me from my future
    i never wanted to get pregnant
    not sayin i am
    cuz i hope not
    expecially not by this guy
    im stressing ova all this now
    wishin it was all jus some illusion
    and illusin plaguing my mind...............


    ............but its not
    and i gots to decide wat ima do
    wat is there from to choose?
    life....school...career....goals....
    and then there is the insert
    of a baby in between each thot
    but i chose to spend fourty dollas
    instead of tryin to hide my belly fo 9 months
    and push for sum hours
    to have this illusion affect my visions in life................
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    very smooth visional creativity here tyte drop ! poet.........
     
  3. Alpha Male

    Alpha Male Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Reply to Daroc

    Daroc, life does present gifts of very profound decisions
    You seem to have been prepared with profound visions

    Great poem you have made
    Please go and seize the day

    Please show me some of your love
    Today read and reply to my thread
    " Dear Alpha Male, please help me, signed the slave from torment land"
    Please tell me about my skills, tell me if their weak
    or show nuff real----------Thank You
     
  4. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    very tight drop
    flow on.....nice
    peace
    angel
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wonderful piece and I really enjoyed reading it, thanks for sharing a part of you with us.
     
  6. daroc

    daroc Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks yall ... its easier to write when u going threw.. jus had ot drop somin since i aint hit yall in a min
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Tight scribe about the what ifs of life...this particular what if can change so many lives so quickly. Makes ya think for sure.
     
  8. angelicsage

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    this created the feeling of such worry
    and stress.../ well conveyed

    nice flow
     
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