Black Poetry : An experimental piece...

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by story, Sep 13, 2002.

  1. story

    story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    A married woman's last vent


    ...9/13/02-1:10PM...
    :(


    After I am dead...

    Dear God, let it not be said

    That I was,

    an ignorant...foolish

    woman that was unGodly and

    nasty, and weird and

    shameful because---

    I loved her

    She is a woman

    That held my heart

    for the majority of my adult life

    I yearned for her

    until my heart ached

    And my iii's leaked

    as I lay next to him..silent, facing the wall...



    I loved her

    But I stayed with him

    I wanted her

    But I stayed with him

    I loved her in mind

    because loving her is a "sin"

    I loved her in my mind until I lost it

    My mind that is---

    I lost it when I couldn't hold her

    I lost it when I couldn't smell her

    I lost it

    I lost my mind

    I died the day I found out

    That she loved me too but stayed

    with her "him"


    A heart attack---

    they say that's what I had...

    kicking, screaming, and scratching my heart fought itself into eternal exhaustion

    and now

    I sleep, silently...

    venting because my life was a lie so I could get to heaven...:cry:

    ~Story

    *watch the PotaToe throwin*
    :x:
     
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    misty Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is a tight piece..
    Nice job Story..
     
  3. story

    story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank you...
     
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    deepgrrl Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Story! This is the first I've read of your work, but it certainly won't be the last. I haven't been around in a while, but I can see that I need to do a little "searching of the archives". Very strong piece indeed. Simple, direct, and very powerful. Loved the heart imagery at the end! And on a personal note, is there anything more tragic than living a lie? If your life is a lie, then where is the truth of your existence? Thanks for provoking the thought!
     
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    I MUST QOUTE DEEPGRRL ON THIS ONE...."VERY POWERFUL"
    DEFINATELY TRHOUGHT PROVOKIN'
    WEN SMOKIN'
    OR TOKIN'--
    THIS GRRL JUST LEFT ME OPEN...........****.......
     
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    story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thank-you....i love feed back...I scribbled this down today while i was in class...

    i love writing from different voices....different backgrounds....i have some from a child's perspective...when i find them i will post them...
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    a true class act dis was tyght gurl!!
     
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    story Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :) cheezin!!!
     
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