Black Poetry : Am i askin to much?

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  1. MzBlkAngel

    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    If I gave you forever
    would you take care of me
    or if I cry that river would
    you wipe my tears….
    Sitting and thinking a
    thought of a few
    My world is upside down
    Tryin to deal with
    What’s inside
    lookin over and under
    tears flow
    soul is closing
    heart drowning
    frozen in time
    and cant release
    like the blues built in a old tune
    from my youth… I have
    went over the edge
    no longer feelin to breath
    dying inside..for I cant
    reach no more
    tired of searching..
    the fire inside burns
    just like hell….

    Would you
    sing to me in the morning
    hold me at noon
    and love me under the moon
    could you forever more….
    Or am I just askin to much?
    All my life I took care of
    Everyone else..just need to know
    When is it my turn?
    where do it end?
    would you
    could you
    can you
    or am I askin to much….

    To be cherished and loved
    showered with the love I give as…
    a mother
    a woman
    a friend
    a mate
    a lover
    where do it end
    or am i just askin to much???
    just really want to know
    when is it my turn?

    blkangel thang
     
  2. krazelyricks

    krazelyricks Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was tyte....you ain't asking for too much....it's just he ain't giving it to you.....this was madd tyte......props given
     
  3. Keita Kenyatta

    Keita Kenyatta going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    this is a tight peice !!! so tight, that to keep it real... i would have to e-mail an answer
     
  4. Nita

    Nita Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    WoW MBA

    This was beautiful..and no you AINT askin too much....I wondering why you took this long askin...I'm the same way sis..
    Give
    GIve
    GIVE
    It's now time to be appreciated...and you are sis..you deserve it.
    One sis
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    whoaaaaaaaaaaaaa!!
    mad tyte and right
    sho nuff not asking
    to much it was once
    said one who so love
    will be loved and caressed
    not by the hope which u
    ask but by the grace of heart
    and surely it's in u to have
    the day is near
    write it speak it and let it all out
     
  6. Twofish

    Twofish Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    and he said...

    am I in a dream?
    did this queen
    so exquisite, so unique
    look at me?
    offer me a place by her feet,
    on her throne,
    allow me to hold her chalice
    to her lips
    as she kissed the edge
    with her angelic grace...
    how I adore her face
    each waking moment
    wanting more, replace
    her sorrow with pure joy
    been dreaming of you since a boy
    and here you are...
    I will be EVERYTHING you ask and MORE
    the Light within your Star...

    {your king will give u even more than u can ever think to ask...}
    BELIEVE IT ACCEPT IT MANIFEST IT
    BELIEVE....ACCEPT....MANIFEST IN FLESH

    oneness
    2fish
     
  7. caramelpython

    caramelpython Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Asking 2 much? Could this be the question posed?
    Are u asking 2 much? when forever u proposed?
    U asked many question...
    and gave much of yourself..
    U asked for suggestions..
    Then gave 2 me and nobody else!

    Always and forever u droped your love into my life
    Always and forever through sunny days and stormy nights.

    yes your tears ran deep and lakes they formed
    But that feed the lands of my life and keept my nature warm.

    your soul dug deep and my drill followed u there
    I was cold in the begining but now I'm as warm as hot air.

    Did u ask 4 too much?
    Never and no are my replys....

    Look deeper and deeper into these "Dam I love U eyes"

    Suprise suprise suprise....

    your turn is upon you feet
    let actions now do what this heart thoust speek.

    I've read every page of what you book had to tell
    I read ever page even the ones u would never sell
    I've touched every pore
    I've kissed every sore
    I've sang every song.. your my cherie amore!

    as a mother u showed love unstressed
    As a woman u gave love finess
    As a friend u saved love in sincere guestures
    As a mate u undressed love and then gave it texture
    As a lover u fought 4 love when it was weak
    As a response to it all I just had 2 speak.

    Now u still think u asking 2 much?

    caramelpython... thanks 4 the inspiration today in this drop.
     
  8. angelicsage

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    Never to much...
    it's your right to be loved
    the way your heart desires...
    Feeling your flow sister!
     
  9. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Not asking too much, too little of substance was offered. Feelin this piece.
     
  10. Alpha Male

    Alpha Male Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Re: TO mzblkangel

    Wonderful poem
    you are not asking for to much
    Please continue to bring us you poetic art
    because it makes me happy and warms my heart
     
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