Black Poetry : ALONE

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  1. sahara heart

    sahara heart Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Gazing out my window, looking down four stories
    Glaring upon your seemingly small figure
    huddled up in your winter coat, sitting at the fountain
    You pull out your drawing book with one hand
    pencil and eraser in the other
    Still hunched over, you begin to draw
    The image of you just sitting there, drawing
    touches my heart profoundly

    Maybe its the view i am getting from up here
    Maybe its the grey skies
    Or the flowing waters of the beautiful fountain
    Or just the still, determined figurine i see before me

    It could be that i want to know wat's in your world,
    Maybe i envy your escape from loneliness and this sad world
    Your calmness, gentle strokes and dire concentration
    move my once stony heart

    In this, I find myself seeing the vivid similarity of us
    when the longing strikes,
    i want to reach out to you
    Let you know I am lonely too
    Tell you what a stranger I am to myself sometimes
    Until, like you, I spill out art onto a blank page
    Yours speaks to people just as mine touches souls

    One thing remains though
    From way up here,
    I am alone
    and all the way down there
    You are alone.
     
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    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    the image of this flow touch me
    in a amazing way feeling how your
    thoughts drift his way
    yess deep within your flow
    you touch on a key
    that felt deep to me
    wonderful flow poet

    Blue
     
  3. sahara heart

    sahara heart Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks poet. glad it touched u. wasnt sure wat i was saying would make sense. i didnt know him but i felt him on a level so deep i could not even understand it myself. thanks again.
     
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    What a peaceful poem.
     
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    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    We are alone too... how profound is that!

    A remarkable peace!
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This profoundly moved me. Just beautiful, poet.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    awesome sweet vibe that took me inside for a ride
    tyte drop sis........
     
  8. sahara heart

    sahara heart Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks for feeling this one ya'll. keep on keepin on with all your tyte drops! i love this fam!!!!! PEACE!
     
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