Black Poetry : AlOnE

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  1. ki-ki2004

    ki-ki2004 Active Member MEMBER

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    Teens on the verge of breaking down
    Wondering when
    And contemplating why everything seems to go wrong
    No one to talk to
    No one to listen
    We are all ALONE.

    Smile and pretend like everthing is alright
    Noone can see what is on the inside
    Thinking that you are just uptight
    If only they had the insight ,
    To see everything that's hurting on the inside
    To feel the pain of tears stinging on the outside
    Wondering if you would have made the right choice
    To stop using the knife.

    Wanting to fit in
    Wanting to be acknowledged
    Wanting to be acknowledged for your individual difference
    But what all my efforts boil down to is insigficant:
    The only feeling I might ever know,
    The only feeling that will always glow,
    The only feeling that I will never show,
    Is me being ALONE.
     
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    gosh i remember those times
    like yesterday
    you are never alone
    but it sure can feel like that sometime
    feeling your release in the flows
    hearing ya:)

    flow on :sand:
    Peace
    BlueWater:heart:
     
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    Many fail to see just how the youth struggle
    This work is a classic!!!
    I'm loving the teens on this site...they comes with it!!!!!!
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    indeed u can feel like ya are alone yet the watchful eye
    is always beside u this was well felt i know bout days like dis
     
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    Antar Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    hey...

    i feel the same way sometimes
    the words you show say more than emotion

    here when you share more...
    /antar
     
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    deepy going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    really nice...
    nice rhyme
    nice write.
    helping me to see
    and understand again
    the things that even at any
    age one can go through
    but the reality , the intensity you give it
    make me aware how special those year...
    YOU are
     
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    good work

    was it only 31 years ago that I felt this way seems like only yesterday tUFFY
    Thank you for the memory. :luvv: :luvv: :luvv:
     
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    Thanks!!!

    Thank you all very much for feeling my poetry. I have plenty more of where that one came from. <<lol>>Thanks alot for all the support and especially for letting me know that I am not "Alone" in feeling like that sometimes. THANKS ALOT EVERYONE..**smiles*
     
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