Black Poetry : Alone

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by dojo54, Oct 25, 2002.

  1. dojo54

    dojo54 Member MEMBER

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    Alone I sit here thinking of the days
    we once had. the years we were together
    ment everything to me.

    There was a time I thought that we would be
    together forever.

    Alone I sit here thinking about the feelings
    I have for you, That will never go away.

    Alone I sit here thinking some how some way If could take back the hurt That I have caused you. I would.

    The day that you told me to leave will always be on my mind.
    It's hard to wonder if you still think of me, or am I just another face you pass along the way.

    Alone I sit here knowing I would give up everything to
    have it all back.

    But for now I'll sit here silently and alone thinking of the good times we had together.
     
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    lpoet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    nice piece i felt the emotion in this

    i should not have been the first person to reply to this but you should know that the amount of replies dosent reflect how good your poem is good work poet and hope to read more of you soon. and if you typically write sad stuff and need sometehing to relate to thats the type of stuff i write about most of the time so check me out if you get the chance and let me know what you think
     
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    Dear dojo- Never will you be just "another face", you were half of my life. I am glad you are thinking of the good times. I am sad we are alone. But in our "silence" is where we will find ourselves. This poem is such an amazing surprise. :)
     
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    lonleypoet thank you for your kind words, I will read your Flows,
    Im sure that we feel the same.

    Gaylee. I mean every word of this flow.
     
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    Dojo54... this is peace.

    alyce
     
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    this is your chance to move on to better things....

    nfinite....
     
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    :) Thank you Aylce I'm Trying,
    :D J'haih Thank you maybe it will happen
     
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    Sherykah I glad you felt this Flow:)
     
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    Dojo, man this was so intense! i was .....man it was good.
     
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    so many of us in despair
    tread upon this Earth alone
    and sometimes it seems so unfair
    our future ahead unknown
    but there is one thing which I know
    deep down inside my heart
    the Love you shared will make you grow
    even when you're apart...


    2fish
     
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