Black Poetry : Alone, Yet, in a Crowded Room.

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  1. plainrhythm

    plainrhythm Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i close my eyes, visions of blood, crooked
    smiles and nakedness surface in front of
    me, i cannot will myself to open them again.
    my mother had taught me to say no, but it
    seemed the teachings were in vain.
    i remembered trying to scream, but the
    words wouldn't come out...

    over and over in my head, i thought i would never
    be accepted in my family again.
    the way he handled me, how he slapped me and
    kissed me so roughly my lips bled.
    he laughed out loud, repeating the words
    "our little secret", where was my mother?
    screaming in the backround "she's only
    twelve, leave my baby!"

    that night i was certain there was no God,
    if there was, did he enjoy watching this?
    i open my eyes again, staring at the face of
    my still mother, wishing time could rewind.
    if i hadn't made such a fuss, my mother would be
    right next to me, smiling a sad smile.

    revenge is all i can think of, my face, now a
    mask, my fears, taken over...
    i look around me, family, friends, tears..
    how can they cry when they weren't there
    before? it should've been one of them.. if i hadn't...
     
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    an interestingly morbid peace....
    keep flowing....

    one love
    khasm
     
  3. plainrhythm

    plainrhythm Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanks, uh... interestingly morbid? :coffee: :coffee:
     
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    lol...yeah, your poem kinda left me speachless because i was stuck try'n to figure out what it was about....those were the only two words i could think of in my confusion...i was a great write because it forced me to read it three times...but i'm still clueless...don't worry, it wasn't a diss...if i can't find something nice to say i say nothing.

    one love
    khasm
     
  5. plainrhythm

    plainrhythm Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    uh... lets see... let me help you out....
    "hands all over... nakedness..." i have a feeling it was about rape.
    if it doesn't seem so, then i'm terrible! but i'm glad you're interested!
    thanks! and now that i look at it.. it IS kinda morbid.

    much love! :hearts4:
     
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    PropheticNsyght Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I can sympathize with this, knowing my sister had been a victim of it.
    All I can do is wish you God's peace, love and strength!
     
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    Innocence being taken away, and when the one you think would always save you, won't, then that is an extra hard blow. I could feel the pain in this write.
     
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    Always remember that God's never puts on us more than we can handle, even when we feel we can't.

    Interesting drop
     
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    digging this vibe really feeling it

    peace
    Angel
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    tyte drop right here flow head.
     
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