Black Poetry : Alone, Goodbye Poetry

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  1. unique1

    unique1 Member MEMBER

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    This pass week I had to leave home and move out on my own. I spent my first year of college at home, but now I just transferred to UC Davis and it'sabout a 2 hour drive from everything I'm use to. Beside that, me and my boyfriend just broke up. For the first time in my 18 years I feel completely alone. This is a piece I wrote recently, I doubt it's realistic that I will not write anymore but this is the most recent thing I've worte so....i don't know. Let me know what you think.

    I'm done writing poetry,
    cause my words cause me to bleed,
    they remind me that I am lonely.
    Pain fills up my being each time I pick up a pen
    because the words that flow
    they remind me that I have no love within.

    And I become plagued with guilt and shame because it seems I don't love me.
    I think myself to be pathetic and
    I am consumed by low self-esteem.
    I am in need of love
    and I know love first comes from self
    but it seems I can't find that love for self that I know would help.

    And poetry keeps reminding me of this
    keeps reminding me that my world has changed
    that I feel all by myself.
    For the first time in life
    I come home to an empty house.
    I don't have anyone to share my days, joys, and pains.

    The love of my life, left me.
    My best friend and family,
    they all too busy.
    Had to leave my job to go to school,
    schools still on break, so i have NOTHING to do
    but sit and write poetry,
    and that just reinforces to me that I am blue.

    So I'm done Poetry
    It's time to stop dwelling that I have to make a new start but don't know exactly how.
    Time to take action and adjust
    to being alone for the first time in life.
    Stop being shy and afraid of the unknown.
    For a short time I must say goodbye
    because it seems that if I keep writing I'll keep fighting this change
    and holding on to the pain.
     
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    what feels alone is shared
    when poetry speaks other's
    care and inside between lines
    new love a new face is there.

    I feel ya yet know the very thing u scribe
    is the release of pain..............poeticly
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    release of the pain was won in this flow...i enjoyed and can relate

    Peace
    Angel
     
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    If we feel that something is reminding us of our pain, it is natural to want to let it go. But this was a well done poetic release all the same, and I think we alll can relate to this.
     
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    Peace Unique 7 welcome to Destee.com,

    You could never be alone as long as you have your pen..............so never put it down, keep it close & it will fill up the emptiness you are feeling!!!!!

    peace
     
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    Girl, I going through the same thing. I'm going off to a college two hours from Atlanta too. I'm going to UGA. Spelman got thrown out the plans so now I have to go to UGA. That's three hours from my boyfriend's school so more than likely we will break up. I'm not ready to let him go but I have to face it, we're probably not going to stay together. OH WELL, LOL. Naw, but for real I am kinda sad for us though. Good poem girl, I feel the same way sometimes. But then I realize that poetry is all that I have and even through tough time poetry is the only way I have to express myself fully. Ya feel me?
     
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