Black Poetry : Almost 2 Years and Counting...

Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by watzinaname, Mar 10, 2005.

  1. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    What would you do
    if you ever saw them again?
    You haven't seen these children in...
    Well, you know how many years it's been
    I know they aren't young any more
    but they're still your seeds
    Both have developed tough skin
    but an unhealed wound still bleeds
    You would be so proud of them
    how they have gone on despite it all
    Your daughter so responsible and supportive
    Your warm and giving son has grown so tall
    I know you think that the only way to save
    yourself, was to get the hell out
    but I know that is not the lesson that you
    want your kids to learn about
    rather the morals and upstanding teaching
    that you used to show that helped them grow
    and I do remind them, so that they know
    that you will always love them so.
    But, sometimes it's hard
    so in this regard
    I have to wonder....
    What would you do
    if you ever saw them again?
     
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    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Watz, you have raised an issue of great importance sister. WELL DONE!

    Fathers take note.
     
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    Prizefighter16 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    i guess i cant really see your exact view, because I am the child, I still enjoyed the poem, because in a way it's comforting to know when a parent is worried, or making themselves vulnerable in a sense, for the child.

    Hopefully the child realizes this.

    really liked this prose

    keep the flow goin
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    feeling every word as i've seen this more then i like and the sad painful
    moments looking upon the very one's u so help birth this was deep and
    bring forth questions that seek answers
     
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    great piece watz...smh
    men should get a scarlet letter A tattoo'd on their forehead...
    for absent fathers...

    one love
    khasm
     
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    What he should do is :bowdown: at your feet, for the Queen Warrior that you are.
    He need to take a :bowdown: ...for the "two" parents you was left to be, and proudly.
    And there will come a day, when just a glass of water, will save his life...
    ...and they will save him...but, hmmm...
    What would he do, when he see them?
     
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    miss-no-love Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Men should take of their responsibilities and do the father thing, GREAT peom

    When you look in the mirror what you see may not be yaself. 1love, TRUE STORY
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you 1poet. Hopefully most of the fathers reading this won't see themselves brotha.
    Rich, some questions just lead to more questions, you never really expect an answer, but you wonder. Thank you for your support.
    Prizefighter, it's nice to hear the point of view of a young person. I think when an older child can see that a parent is vulnerable enough to feel pain, but strong enough to still be a parent, then they are okay. Thank you for your response.
    Perhaps the conscience forms its own tatoo Khasm, thank you for responding so.
    That was truly kind of you to say queent, and I appreciate it. Your response truly leaves me with something to think about, and thank you for that.
    Miss-no-love, I think there are some things we do, that changes the image we see of ourselves forever. Thank you for your response.
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    AWESOME drop! So poignant, sister.
     
  10. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thank you gempis for giving me props on this. Yes, life can be like that sometimes.
     
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