Black Poetry : all too long

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  1. tzevi1278

    tzevi1278 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    all too long

    From the moment our eyes met,
    I felt a connection,
    forbidden thoughts, but couldn’t halt their conception.
    I played with the notion of approaching on the sneak tip,
    but quickly deaded the thought,
    too risky, plus beneath it
    was an air of indecent visions that frequent
    my mind like a sequence
    of events that relinquish all attempts to extinguish,
    my curiosity . . .

    So I wrote about,
    and I wrote about it,
    and I wrote about it,

    til my notebook pleaded for mercy
    crowded pages of poetry,
    pen thirsty . . .
    Writing, til blisters became braille cheat sheets,
    discreet speech,
    mouthing melancholy melodies of defeat
    and I haven’t even approached you yet.
    It’s like my pen’s gone schizo-frantic
    sketching hoop dreams on conflicted canvas,
    longing to brandish that tattooed heart on my sleeve,
    temporary infatuation as I watch the henna bleed.
    Temperance of a punch drunk love,
    girl I’m watching you.
     
  2. queentswana

    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    In what you said, is no Mystery,
    cause I was watching you ...watch me.

    wishing to myself that perhaps one day,
    your love would soon slide past my way.

    Call it schizo-frantic, or whatever you please,
    one things for sure...you're all I need.

    So, go ahead, write about it ...it's your whirl,
    cause one things for sure, I'll be your girl.

    It's really good to see ya back in the house, it's been a minute, enjoyed your piece poet, don't be a stranger...Welcome back home tzevi1278
     
  3. Ikoro

    Ikoro Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Peace fam.

    That henna line topped it off. Nice.

    One.

    -Ikoro
     
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    cocobutterskyn Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I enjoyed...

    the way this came together and would love to read more of what you write about.

    Very nice!


    MaddSistahlyLove!
    Coco:heart:
     
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    I know your watching me cuz Im watching you
    And there ‘s no need for you to be shy
    I see your working with a little something too

    A poetic man will always have a chance
    To dry the ink in my pen

    So while your ova there trying to write
    What you think might….be the right
    Words to say to me

    I will be sitting ova here pretending
    To be naïve like I don’t see you
    And I promise I wont get up and leave

    Until you have written enough words
    To may yourself believe
    That my tattooed heart
    is something you can achieve

    If only you
    Stop watchn me
    Watch you

    I am so luving your flow....:luvv:
     
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    Lataisha Nicole Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You are quite refreshing, you make me think of the days when chivalry was alive and well. This poem makes me think of the days when a guy could have a crush on a girl, and "yo baby yo and your hot baby" was not the words that fell from his lips. It's like dang this dude thought I was fly and went home and wrote about it. Now that's hot!

    forrealpoetry.com
     
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    cherryblossom Banned MEMBER

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    Well, alrighty-then!

    This read like a blues song! A man in love or some strong like and he is pouring his heart out and his shyness onto paper, telling his story of worshiping from afar.


    You're talking yourself OUT before you even get in! (lol)

    Yeah. You got it bad! (smile)
     
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    tzevi1248

    Nice flow

    Much to loose, a friendship perhaps.
    Keep flowing poet
    Good things often come from difficult experiences.
     
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    the potential for love...

    that first (eye) contact. SHOULD I...or...SHOULD I NOT. hmmm.

    NICE.
     
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