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Discussion in 'Black Poetry - Get Your Flow On!' started by Derrick Jay, Mar 27, 2002.

  1. Derrick Jay

    Derrick Jay Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    all thats needed is one lifetime
    to do it right
    but lifespans thought past midnight
    the struggle goes on
    day before daybreak
    sending passive sons to the creator
    while the earth quakes revenge
    for the sins of a fathers smile
    lost on the doorstep of a forgotten child
    its wild that war goes on the front page news
    but neighbors sit home lost and confused
    refusing to look past the tv screen
    pick up mentality
    find a new meaning
    tears streaming down like slow hurried rain
    hiding marks from brutal pain of the game
    thats played without rules
    on the court strong
    ready to make fools of those whose choose to ingore
    or can't see for long
    roles being starved by needy greed
    to aquire a bit of fire within
    planting infertile seeds
    just to make home be whole again
    and to think this plan was once original
    before the map passed on to smooth criminals
    now remixed
    latest form regurgitated
    all night standing in line
    waiting
    for one true chance at glorys gate
    but tickets sold out
    it was too late to repair the hearts bleeding fast
    on the highway switching lanes
    out of gas
    in the past the pathway was marked so clear
    now overgrowth clouds the singing ear
    but when the darkest knight comes to call
    hobgoblins will run
    babylon will fall to its knees
    in thanks for all forgiveness
    giving blessings to those
    who bid fond remembrance
    of once upon a time when its better to forget
    spirit worn guardians soaking wet
    with the blood of hands worked for years
    to build the kingdom master finally fears
    when it sneers backwards giving that final quip
    over land where slaves hold the eternal whip
     
  2. Afridancr

    Afridancr Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Simply in awe

    of your writing skills and and the way you lay down your thoughts.


    I am moved...:eek:

    Aminata
     
  3. alyce

    alyce Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    so good to read you... your pen is ever evolving, and it's all so very good.

    thank you

    a
     
  4. Rashad

    Rashad Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wow!

    Blew me away on this here Poet!!
    Excellent Scribe!!:toast:
     
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    wildflower7 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this flowed so smoothly between my fingers
    i must read one mo' gin!
    -7:spinstar:
     
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    GQ Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Derrick

    So, so glad to read you again brotha!!!

    This flow was :puke2:!!!

    :peace:
    GQ
     
  7. Derrick Jay

    Derrick Jay Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanx fam, couldn't do this without ya'll...

    one,
    Derrick Jay
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    man dis here is tyght u pose a masterpiece fo sho!!!!!!!!!
     
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    blakverb Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    nice brother nice...

    Big 10...no doubt

    blak
     
  10. Derrick Jay

    Derrick Jay Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thanx, from one to another we are sistas and brothas...together

    One,
    Derrick Jay
     
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