Poetry Critiques : All Of Him

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  1. TymeFlyz247

    TymeFlyz247 Member MEMBER

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    To touch him,hold him tight.
    To smell him, feel him through the night.
    Tasting, teasing, pleasing him.
    wide open wide, keeps me high.
    Wide open wide, Ooh, as he pushes, deep, in between
    my thighs.
    Steadily I climb high, and higher,slipping and
    sliding into ecstasy arms. Guiding me in the
    direction of pure expression....Love.
    Pouring out, falling out, busting out, love flows from
    me freely like water. Flows from me to
    he, completely. Covering him,smothering
    him,engulfing him.He’s drowning.In my substance..In
    my affection.. In my attention..In My madness.Never
    asking any questions. Never looking back.Never
    second guessing..self. Always falling head
    first.Caught up. Every thing’s
    *****d up.Sad.Mad.Lonley.Hurt.When will the generational
    curse be broken?The learned,unlearned?All this for
    what?For.. all of him for the price of me.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    and dat's pure love in bliss
    tyte write don't change it .........awesome
     
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    Thank you...for so long I have kept my writings to myself. I'm sure out of fear. Your words are very encouraging.
    Again, :thanks:
     
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    most welcome better out then in speak on and let da world know ya feelings
     
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    respect

    great write, give us more of the ones you have been keeping to yourself.
     
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    Your words took us on this course of exhilarating highs and then the plunge back down. You expressed yourself quite well, and I am looking forward to reading more from you.