Black Poetry : All I Ever Wanted

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  1. Aaliyahmonet

    Aaliyahmonet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I wake up and see the sun shinin on my face,
    I wonder if my dreams will take me to another place,
    Somewhere far away, where i can here the doves sing,
    I listen to the echoes in my voice,
    I sit down and stare at the waves in the sea,
    Watchin the blue water swiftin over my feet,
    The sand is really rough,
    But i`m gettin to wonder,
    Where will i be,
    If god never took me here,
    All i ever wanted,
    Was to be here with u,
    I don`t wanna go nowhere else,
    But here,
    Here is where i am,
    It`s where i wanna be,
    There`s not a tear in my eye,
    That i cry,
    But only a smile,
    To make u happy,
    I don`t want to feel alone,
    In this sad world,
    Love me and cherish me,
    Every step of the way,
    Promise never to leave me,
    Without taking me with u,
    Lead the way,
    I`m a rose drowning in pedals,
    But only your presence takes away my pain,
    There`s no grief to spare,
    But only a heart to care,
    All i ever wanted,
    Was time to share.

    AM :sand:
     
  2. jazzymoonchild

    jazzymoonchild Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    That was really pretty, poet. Keep scribing..

    Jazzy
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    my sistah gurl u laid out a map so divine
    this was awesome scribing wow!!!
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I agree with jazzymoonchild, this was a very pretty poem, the colors you used only emphasized your words.
     
  5. caramelpython

    caramelpython Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    :read: I enjoyed this alot.
     
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    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this was so touching...
    so much emotion
    lovely scribe sister!
     
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    rasheed Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Aaliyahmonet,
    Well crafted poetic expression
    feels like a nice flowing message from the heart.....

    Peace and Blessings
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Wonderful work of art, I enjoyed reading this a lot. thanks for sharing.
     
  9. Aaliyahmonet

    Aaliyahmonet Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks:)

    Thank you all for responding. I'm just glad to be back on the spot. I took a little vacation, and now i'm rejuvenated,lol.

    1 luv:)
     
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