Black Poetry : All about love? unfin.

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  1. THEONE

    THEONE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Love?Good?BaD?

    Thats the question Im left asking myself now that your gone
    Countless hours, pondering uncomprehensive reason on what went wrong

    Where we that different, did I misuse, abuse or treat you respectless
    Can you offer understanding, cause right now Im feeling helpless

    Was it my lack of patient, or my burden to reason
    Did I ask to many question........... or was I out season

    Why am I alone, when love was suppose to be the answer
    Now Im left hopeless with sorrow, holding pitty for ransom

    My days havent been the same, my nights no different
    Thoughts that send me chills, memories that keep me driften

    Im often left wondering if there was ever a such thing
    Love, Relationship, Trust the ropes in which I now hang

    What happen to relief, joy, enlightment, I was suppose to feel
    Could it be overshadow by spite, negativity and your ill will

    Love.... Love.... lOve.... and its hidden little snaggs
    Ill only looked at the upside, but was smack by the bad!

    Knocked around left punch drunk by loves up and downs
    Confused and baffled when its not around

    Love............Love......Love unstable but somehow I need it
    When Im away from it its like Im starvain, and my heart aches to feed it!



    Unfin
     
  2. Monetary

    Monetary going above and beyond PREMIUM MEMBER

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    THEONE

    This peace is on its way to being extremely tight.

    Finish it...finish it. :D

    :thanks: for sharing a very good unfinished peace.

    :toast:
     
  3. THEONE

    THEONE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    RiGHT ON MONETARY, thnks for the read means alot from such a extraordinary poet
     
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    I vote Love is good. Love is bad. Love will make you happy and keep you sad. Looking around, wondering where it is. Standing beside you. Love is to give. Fleeting moments as you expressed. Love isn't done with us yet.

    Playing around it seems with feelings. Leaving broken hearts in piles. Picking new victims to leave screaming why love only stayed a while. Maybe it never left, but must be renewed. Some how from within us, like sharing food. Give a slice, and get a plate. Love is coming again. It's our fate.

    If you had love even for a while, then you will recognize it if you don't close your eyes. Don't close your heart. Don't be afraid. Love has passes to every charade. Taste it while its there. Cherish it while it's in the air. Cause love hurts. Love causes growth.

    One... you nailed love in this post.

    " Love.... Love.... lOve.... and its hidden little snaggs "

    It leaves just like you said. Empty. Hungry. Naked to vulnerability’s. No one can hide. When love is calls. You better answer.
     
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    Aahhhhh yes...I'm feeling this one deeply...
    it's like that pain that feels so good
    and with all it's flaws and imperfections
    we can't live without out...can't breathe
    can't exist...
    there's nothing worse than not knowing
    where the love went wrong...

    I love the raw emotion and confession in this peace!

    Wonderful...so glad to have you flowing with us again :spinstar:
     
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    Isnt it that way though...
    wondering...
    searching....
    and just when you think you know...
    the facts elude you *sigh*
    and you said it well brotha :)
     
  7. THEONE

    THEONE Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Hodee...... WOW Im diggen the connnection with this piece, I see your talent is unlimited!

    Angelicsage..........This read means a lot coming from such an artist like yourself.....thnks

    triniti424................thnks for the read, Im a fan of your work so this read means alot,

    Thnks all it great to get understanding from such fine Artist
     
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    feelin ya flow ...
    its that suprise mystery
    it takes you and twist you up
    then the searching and wondering
    wheeeew...i tell ya....
    nice drop..unfinish or not
    this is a tight drop!!!
     
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    It didn't read like it was unfinished, since an uncertain love leaves you feeling just that way, up in the air. Such a wonderful feeling yet so many questions associated with it...loved the way you posed these thoughts.
     
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