Black Poetry : Ain't no sunshine

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  1. Passionfruit005

    Passionfruit005 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Ain't no sunshine when she's gone
    It's not warm when she's away
    Ain't no sunshine when she's gone
    And she's always gone too long anytime
    She goes away

    he stood in that spot,
    like the center of the world,
    spot light beaming off the sweat on his brows,
    even tho a hot summers night, he was engulfed in a hoody,
    more like swallowed in its cottony womb
    Holding false lies from false prophets
    lookin for the material keys to the world
    Wonder this time where she's gone
    Wonder if she's gone to stay
    Ain't no sunshine when she's gone
    And this house just ain't a home
    Anytime she goes away
    the paper,
    fire that consumes the world, leaving nothing much but ashes
    but in the hands of the masses
    a vital weapon
    and to the minority a desperate enemy, a two faced savior,
    an angel in the light hands washed in blood
    And I know, I know, I know, I know, I know
    I know, I know, I know, I know, I know
    I know, I know, I know, I know, I know
    I know, I know I know, I know, I know

    yet he stands on that corner like a night in shining armor,
    willful of her betrayal, but in total love of her
    ,slaying a dragon, thats bigger then himself, an enemy, from with in, his own mortality,
    Holding the gift of death in the palms of his hands
    but by a trick of light, many thinks he sells life
    when stranded in the dark so long, even the smokiest of crystals seem clear,
    Hey I'll leave the young thing alone
    But ain't no sunshine when she's gone
    Ain't no sunshine when she's gone

    so he stands on that corner, day in to day out, contemplating, planing, scheming his way up society,he keeps a low profile, and stays open minded, gettin more, flippin profits for prophets that could no less give a dam, not about a man from his world, he continues to sell, infected dreams, in a world where the stage is black and the play is bleak, he stands in that spot as if in the center of the world
    spot light beaming off of him
    Ain't no sunshine when she's gone
    And this house just ain't no home
    Anytime she goes away
    Anytime she goes away
    Anytime she goes away
    Anytime she goes away
     
  2. Sweet baby_face

    Sweet baby_face Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is deep.
    I like yr twist to a classic.
    I could really visualize yr words.
     
  3. Tantrum

    Tantrum Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Felt this poet
    Lovely vibe
    Much Love Passion
     
  4. Akilah

    Akilah Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This is absolutely AWESOME...flow on poet
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    You flowed off of that Bill Wither's piece so smoothly, giving it your own flava. And I bet this sounds great live. Lovin this flow.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    very well done poet ....tyte drop !
     
  7. nml26

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    Nice...very, nice.
     
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    i like this flow flo on poet.
     
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    This is so original and creative poet! Lovin it!
     
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