Black Poetry : Again It's You

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  1. mzpoetic8705

    mzpoetic8705 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Let today be a warm awakening
    From the peace of mind lost
    And found
    Discovered
    And hidden
    I found you.
    My mornings twist the light
    Which shines on you
    Bright and radiant is you
    And just in case you are under the assumption
    That this poem is about you
    Once again, your mind has lied to you
    Your fallacious strokes
    Lead me to believe in you
    A mistake I’ve made
    Never again
    Allow another man to be the subject of my pen
    Non-deserving
    Humiliated
    Ashamed
    Insulted
    That you’d even contemplate a plan
    Crept in my pages
    Stole the words from my soul
    And replaced them with you
    Hard to escape a dream that felt so true
    And now I’m left thinking
    “Without him I don’t know what the **** I’m gone do”
    Got me listening to Toni B
    “I guess I’m all torn up now baby”
    Call you like crazy
    Oh yeah he sure is my baby
    A baby I was in your arms
    Being toyed with
    Played and used
    Threw me away
    Said there was no use
    For you
    Hurt and embarrassed
    To ever think a man like you would ever be true to a chick like me!
    A fool
    A **** fool but never again will I allow another man
    To stroke my pen the way you have
    Can’t stand to be around
    So I turn around hoping to replace you
    And there you are again
    Get away but I can’t ever
    Never
    Say I
    Want you
    Cause I do
    And still I dial the numbers
    Which lead me to a recording
    Once again failed to be true
    My emotions will not allow me to speak negative of you
    Don’t worry I am not alone
    For there are others who feel as I do

    Maybe one day you will read this
    Discovering the meaning behind it all
    I’ve written poem after poem
    Line after line
    And time after time, I’ve been made a fool of
    Deceived
    Toyed with
    Mocked
    Here I sit
    Saying it is final
    My pen no longer carries the strength
    To speak of you
    Draw metaphors
    And similes of you
    Create fantasies
    Erupting love for you
    Still, I sit here saying….
    “Hey. How are you?”
     
  2. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Sometimes our mind knows it's high time to leave, but the heart keeps echoing a bitter sweet refrain. The depth of this piece was awesome.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    hey sista Mzpoetic nice reading you again u broke it down
     
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    mzpoetic8705 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Thanks :) for the love
     
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    islander Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I am feelin this poem right now...I needed to read that...thank you!
     
  6. mzpoetic8705

    mzpoetic8705 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    no problem, u are more than welcome :)
     
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    karma55 Active Member MEMBER

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    wow! i feel like you just jump in my brain and wrote that poem! i feel you one hundred percent! its hard lettin go even when you know you should! i call him my bad habit! great poem poet keep on keepin on!
     
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    BOLD

    Yet, so tasteful

    &

    Be some TRUTH

    Ya pen, keep me intrigued and inspired. Go- ahead again!

    -Desert Storm
     
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    Your words speak volumes.
    It is an emotional awakening, and sometimes the pen strokes
    Take the lead.
    I enjoyed reading your poem

     
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    Tantrum Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    My mornings twist the light
    Which shines on you
    Bright and radiant is you
    And just in case you are under the assumption
    That this poem is about you
    ^^^
    my fav part

    this is a very emotional piece i read this one twice awesome read
    8.5/10
     
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