Black Poetry : After the shots rang out

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  1. ille$t poete$$

    ille$t poete$$ Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    As daylight slowly decends to the dim darkness of night
    Faces grow grim with tears in eyes
    As all they see is the shimmer and shine of loud raging ploice lights
    as shots rang round after round all night
    A young man lost his life
    Because of his brutha
    And naw, naw..naw they wasn't fightin each other
    this fight rang out because of opposite side & opposite colors
    And when that one boy's brutha came roun' and realized what was about to go down
    He tried to prevent it by sound, the sound of reason, his voice
    But still by choice no ones anger even for a moment seized to be still
    shots were still fired
    Until that one boys brutha's last breath expired
    the sounds of cowards running feet hit the silent sounds of the streets
    As that one boy's brutha blood staind shirt landed near the lush green earth
    for that moment...thats when the shots seized to depurse
    But then it was too late to try to prevent the fate of his now late btutha
    one life taken to save anotha
    the destined fate of 1 brutha was now misplaced and taken by the other
    Voice of reason...is now no more
    Too bad mama didnt know her babyboy was in a gang
    if so maybe things would have been different
    The future could of been changed :cry:

    dedicated to "that one boy's brutha"...u know who you are...im sorry :cry: :cry: :cry: R.I.P
     
  2. Twofish

    Twofish Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    May he look down from the heavens with forgiveness and forever rest in peace.
    This form of poetry is the purest: REALITY...it's just a shame you had to be writing about a real-life experience.

    2fish
    STRENGTH ENCOURAGEMENT PEACE JOY LOVE
     
  3. Nita

    Nita Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    smh....

    another life lost
    the thing is will anyone remember in the morning..or will
    life just go on?
    I gotta go...I need a tissue
    Peace
    Nita
     
  4. ille$t poete$$

    ille$t poete$$ Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    thnx 4 tha luv yall...& yes its a shame that such a tragedy had to occur to a young man like this poem talks about...i wish that things could of been different
     
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    queentswana Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    sadly, until we drop the colors, RED and BLUE... and reach back to our original color... "BLACK" ... bodies will unfortunily continue to drop...rapidly. They say the "young" is our future but...we are burying our future...on a daily.
     
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    triniti424 Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    yes sista...it is heartbreaking..but we must carry on...perhaps you wouldnt mind sharing this dedication in chat with the rest of the family...It would be a wonderful way to solidify your dedication my sista :)
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    A cryin shame no matter how often the story is told, and I felt the way you told it.
     
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    this is a real scribe
    sad...but i like the way you laid it out
    keep talkin....
    one love
    khasm
     
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