Black Poetry : after loving u

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  1. THA HOOKUPMAN

    THA HOOKUPMAN Banned MEMBER

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    after loving u


    360 times with
    breaking backspines and
    my mind my mind my
    mind i
    found myself in an acute angle
    10 years behind where i needed 2 b
    with u

    after loving u
    365 days with
    rhythmic sways musical
    words and melodic kisses
    after
    loving u with my soul
    my all
    my body
    when u
    call
    i

    find myself closing my eyes
    pressing them tight
    seeing night as clear as day and
    seeing that
    i'm no more me
    than i was yesterday
    after
    loving u

    after loving u
    u called my name
    and
    i didn't respond
    because
    i forgot who

    i was
    i am
    lost after loving u
    with every last breath
    and
    death is my requiem
    when singing my song
    because

    after loving u

    my identity was gone
    stripped of me like banana peels
    you got the flesh
    and left me with the skin
    you got the juices
    while i
    was sucked thin
    sucked in
    tucked in to my mind's shell
    seeing how far "Back" (back - back) I
    fell...

    Hell

    could never be this deep
    life
    made attempts but couldn't
    awaken me from
    my
    sleep
    with eyes tightly squeezed i
    tremble
    as my thoughts freeze
    on images of a lost me
    found in a virtual u
    my
    "boo"

    and yet

    we've been thru b 4 i
    met
    u
    after loving u
    9 months
    reborn in u
    and split
    in
    2
    times 360
    times infinity
    times one
    u



    silenced my heart's drum
    replaced with the regurgitated splashes
    of bacardi rum and strong wine


    u
    beat me up
    with
    verbal slaps and
    silent tongue lashes
    the fire u kindled to me
    has shriveled to black ashes
    along with my hope
    4 ever
    falling in love
    and yet
    after loving u
    again
    taking u
    back in
    again
    after u and i agreed
    this had 2 end

    i
    begin my
    new life again
    realizing
    that the only reason
    history repeats itself
    in a 360 degree turn
    is cuz

    i chose ignorance
    over acceptance
    chose sex
    over love
    chose contentment
    over happiness
    chose to play with fire
    chose to burn
    instead of making the decision
    to

    return

    return to my heart
    which gave me the signs
    return to my soul
    which questioned my mind
    returned to my spirit
    led by
    the DIVINE

    i chose to press forward
    not realizing
    i took ten steps behind

    i chose to force the future
    not knowing
    i cannot pressure time

    after loving u
    and sticking the finger of rememberence
    down my mind's throat
    i
    vomitted your presence "in" me
    let the "waterfalls" of God's Presence
    cleanse me
    and

    "listened..."

    to the voice that called within me

    to

    return...

    and ever since

    i've loved myself



    i hope yawl can feel this...hookup :happens: :thinking: :thinking: :thinking: :thinking: :thinking: :thinking: :thinking: :thinking: :thinking: :thinking: :thinking: :thinking:
     
  2. sevens_love

    sevens_love Active Member MEMBER

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    this is just awsome...:hot:
     
  3. angelicsage

    angelicsage Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Love...

    this peace never gets easy for me...

    it stings...with the unforgiving empathy

    every time I read it...my soul :cry: and :cry: and cries...

    and then she reaches through time

    and holds your pain...knowing that it was

    the culmination of your past lives that have made

    you as beautiful as you are...

    and for that I am blessed...

    This piece is pain...in the form of a masterpiece

    Holding you... :heart: :crying:
     
  4. Khasm13

    Khasm13 STAFF STAFF

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    this was on point my man....and heartfelt
    especially this stanza....

    i chose ignorance
    over acceptance
    chose sex
    over love
    chose contentment
    over happiness
    chose to play with fire
    chose to burn
    instead of making the decision



    keep dropin da sentences
    of experiences...
    one love
    khasm
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    outstanding flowing here wow!!!!
     
  6. peach_so_sweet

    peach_so_sweet Active Member MEMBER

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    That was BEAUTIFUL!

    Comic Sans MS Your poem was beauitful. It was deep I couldn't stop reading it. I wish their were more brothas out their who could express their feelings like that. :great: :star: :star: :star: :star: :star: :star: :angel1:
     
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    oh gosh..you really release
    a flow of emotion in this flow
    I was trailing each line
    feeling the rush
    wonderful flow poet


    Blue
     
  8. Rhyme4ReasonFBR

    Rhyme4ReasonFBR Active Member MEMBER

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    Hmmmm, reflecting, this is my first taste keep it flowing so I can understand completely what stirs within. respect GOD, keep posting
     
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    gempis Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    There are so many truths here. Amazing piece, just phenomenal. I feel you 100 percent.
     
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    Hewwwwwww. I just realized I was unconsciously holding my breath while reading this piece. Gorgeous.
     
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