Black Poetry : Act three, please take note

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  1. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Rewind to Act 3, please take note
    the living room looks a little too lived in.
    Jackets strewn all over, leather coat
    pockets turned inside out, emptied.
    Receipts crumpled on the floor
    from some unattended romantic tryst.
    New cologne sample worn for that whore
    in those unfamiliar pictures torched
    with ashes dancing around a gold band
    whose chemical composition is more
    resilient than the marriage at hand
    was ever worth.
    A charred letter read:
    Sweetheart, let her down easy,
    don't say your love is dead
    on your anniversary.
    You don't have to say any more
    than I still love you,
    but not like before.
     
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    1poetsought Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The set, the scene... you make it all work!
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I'm glad that this works for you. Thanks for your praise, 1poetsought.
     
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    AfroBoricuaRoni Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The picture you just painted was on point.

    -Roni :heart:
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    you know i love your written skills...
    this movie you vision and painted wow...
    is it anymore....:angel1:
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    tooo sweetttttttttt !!! lovin it
    u go poeet of the week shine on
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Glad you appreciated my painting, thanks Roni.

    Thank you, mzblkangel. There is going to be more, I just have to twist it somehow to make it different and still work, you know?

    Thank you for allowing me to shine Rich!
     
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