Black Poetry : Act four, before the note was simple....

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  1. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Before the simple note was written,
    Let's rewind to act four,
    It appears our damsel was quite smitten,
    ill prepared for what was in store.
    The setting is a bedroom,
    candle wax smelled of lavender,
    the bubbly, no longer, uncorked.
    It seemed as though a scavenger
    rummaged through the lingerie drawer.
    Pictures of a happy couple, scattered,
    A champagne flute shattered,
    glass intermingled
    with that of the full length mirror.
    A jagged blade,
    used in vein, used in terror,
    on top a sheet made
    unexpectedly crimson.
    There is no rhyme or reason,
    that his note would say no more
    than I still love you,
    but not like before.
     
  2. AfroBoricuaRoni

    AfroBoricuaRoni Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    this is sooooooo tight

    this piece was so tight man. it allowed be to paint a mental reflection with vivid details. nice job.


    Roni
     
  3. watzinaname

    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    I'm glad the images were crystal enough so that you could see...thankyou, Roni.
     
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    MzBlkAngel Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    you did it again

    like a scene...and i am sittin watchin the move..
    nice just nice...
    much love my sister on dis..wow:angel1:
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Mzblkangel, I'm humbled by your applause...thank you.
     
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    PositiveMindset Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    This was serious.

    All I could think of was "woah".
     
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    Bluewater Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    The vision
    The note
    a puzzle
    As it unlock more
    Of what maybe in store
    deep
    Peace
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    Brings a smile to my face that my words caused you to pause and take the time to drop a line, thank you Positivemindset. Bluewater, I'm glad I've piqued your interest to learn more, thank you too.
     
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    $$RICH$$ Lyon King Admin. STAFF

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    i felt this deep and was like wow!!
     
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    watzinaname Well-Known Member MEMBER

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    OK, Rich et al, I'm beginning to not know how to act--and I can't have that. :blush: Thank you for your praise.
     
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